Question

I have a poem I wrote for my History class, about women's rights. Is anyone willing to read it and tell me if I need to improve in something ?

Answer 1

how does it sound ? is it good or do you think I should add more description to it, or feelings ? (IGNORE THE GRAMMAR)

Answer 2

I WILL NOT IGNORE THE GRAMMAR

Answer 3

GEE. I'll edit it i rpomise I'm not stupid enough to take it like that. I just wanna know if I need other improvemnets BESIDESS THE FREAKIN GRAMMAR.

Answer 4

The ending sounds unfinished.
"What you're saying is frivolity..." unless that's how you wanted it to sound.

Poetry is poetry, so you honestly are incapable of screwing up or doing something wrong lol

The poem is very well written :) good job, tima ♥

Answer 5

"Poetry is poetry, so you honestly are incapable of screwing up or doing something wrong lol"
well actually you can if you use bad grammar >.> hehe

Answer 6

wife's dinner , replace that with supper

Answer 7

Hbb thanks(:! but what it seemed by unfinished ? did it seem like it was hanged, cut. or like there is more words to it ?

Answer 8

What you're saying should not be unsaid.

Answer 9

^replace what he said with "What you're saying is frivolity"

Answer 10

sham was that to me, or to the poem ?

Answer 11

the poem. replace "What you're saying is frivolity" with "What you're saying should not be unsaid."

Answer 12

But i want it to leave friviolity to ryme a bit with equality, like the woman saying. I like ryme in poems lol

Answer 13

ahhh okay now I get what you're doing.

Answer 14

*rhyme

Answer 15

See if I didn't have this thing for rhyming this would be soo much easier. but i like Rhyme ;/

Answer 16

i would like to read it :)......

Answer 17

Sure, (: when you're online I'll post it.

Answer 18

hummm ...sent it to me.....if u can and if cant then i will sent u my email.. :)