Question

writing composition about anything, so i decided to write some random stuff in my mind.. can someone kindly check it? :)

Answer 1

It's a poem...

Answer 2

not really, my teacher said, just write anything

Answer 3

so that she can check how we think.. something like that :/

Answer 4

I like it

Answer 5

really? (^_^).. so what did you think about me, after you read this?
am i too what?

Answer 6

here's a poem I did something similar but i think yours is better

Faded Love

My heart skips a beat
There is a knot in my throat
I choke on confusion
As tears swell up in my eyes

I try to take my mind off it
I try to look on the bright side
But all i see is a dark cold
Nothing seems to be right

What happened my love
what went wrong
Was it all a dream
And this is me waking up into reality

I can remember what we once were
I can remember what we once had
The laughs echo in my ears
Your warmth of your hand close to mine

I scream in the inside
I call your name
But i hear no answer
All i hear is the dead of silence

Why are you doing this
What wrong did i do
I am sorry for the past
but please talk to me

Please answer my call
The pain goes deeper
Can't you see it
Do you feel the same way

Or is that a perfect smile on your face
Set me free
Let me out
The cold is burning me

My tears are dry
i no longer can cry
I wait for you
I wait

Your promise you swore
but i see you do nothing
How much longer must i wait
I said everything
my heart was open

My love it is your turn
to make things right
To let me know
What's on your mind

The memories in my mind
swirling in my life
It is hard to breath
every time you pass me

Do you realize
Do you recognize
Our friendship that once was
Is vanishing with every hour


I wait for you my love
I wait for you
It is your turn
to make things right

Answer 7

actually this one sounds more like yours


Unbreakable

Things aren't working out
Things are breaking down
Saying things that only leave pain
Saying things that only leave scares

Storming up inside
Storming on your way out the door
Walking away without looking back
Walking with regret

Trying to clear your mind
Trying to be positive
Confused about what went wrong
Confused about who you were

Seeing it was your mistake
Seeing it only left tears
Running back apologying
Running back not knowing

She's doing the same
She's torn apart with what was
knowing all can change
knowing everything doesn't have to be this way

Looking for your life
Looking for what's not there
Where is she
Where can you start again

Is it harder then you thought
Is everything ruined with your heart
Your mind only says it's over

She's gone
She's in a blurr
Can no longer breath
Can no longer see

Never surrender
Never stoping to find your life
There she is hanging on to what's left
There she says in simplest words

Sorry for the pain
Sorry for not being who I am
Hold on to what you may have lost
Hold onto what's slipping with the rain

Don't cry now
Don't give up
Everything will be okay
Everything can change

Answer 8

WOW!! lol, i can't compete with yours!, you are way better XD
-_- i feel ashamed of what i did now.. hahaha!

Answer 9

LOL! at the very end yours doesn't sound like a poem but in the beginning it did. You sound like a nice guy... I mean one that would own up to his mistakes

Answer 10

wait which poem did you like better Faded or Unbreakable?

Answer 11

oh thanks! both are grade, but i can feel the second one better :)

Answer 12

*great-i mean not grade >.>

Answer 13

:-) Well I hope your teacher likes the way you think through what you wrote. You should try writing something like simple like how you are lets saying watching the leaves fall from the trees and in the mean time thinking how that single leaf fell so did your heart... and let the reader go inside you with full emotion :)

Answer 14

ohh, i forgot you're a writer! XD
i actually referring to someone with my composition ;p
hey thanks a lot!,
btw, i really like the "rainy days" on your blog (^_^)

Answer 15

haha thanks!!! I'm glad i was able to read what you wrote i thought it was wonderful! btw don't forget to follow my blog publicly- I will be having a sweepstakes next month and I will be giving out prizes to all my followers... :-)

Answer 16

lol, i followed you privately XD, how can i change it?

Answer 17

just click follow this site again and switch it don't worry about ppl looking at ur profile they can't see it unless they are your friend on G+ and are also following me on my blog

Answer 18

oohh.. kk:)

Answer 19

i loved it Data!:) that is talent! like it was awesome!!:D

Answer 20

DATA! Im like "Whoa O_O" Are you okay? Lol. It was awesome. I love the "Im unofficially yours and you're unofficially mine" HAHAHAHA. You're talented, Data. Your composition is great ^_^

Answer 21

;'') Data that was beautiful. That person your talking about is really lucky. I see why he/she forgave you. Your an amazing person,mister!