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anonymous · Answer

this sounds great.

anonymous · Answer

Keep everything in one tense, preferably present, and you are good to go.

the_fizicx99 · Answer

Sounds good.

wolfe8 · Answer

Well I saw one grammatical error for now I think. Third paragraph, first line, aren't you using past tense for the rest of the example?

anonymous · Answer

i like it ...its beautiful :)...good work and keep it up :)

wolfe8 · Answer

You have a few more present tenses in there from my skimming. You might want to check the grammars.

thadyoung · Answer

the only thing i saw wrong was what wolfe said im still looking

wolfe8 · Answer

Well the line about Napoleon.

thadyoung · Answer

mabey say The sheep "for example," were his most important tools throughout the novel.

wolfe8 · Answer

Well now I'm seeing that you're talking about a story. Then you might want to make sure you're using the right tenses for telling a historical fact, and for reviewing a story. Be sure ti me consistent.

thadyoung · Answer

oh its about a story...i feel dumb lol