Question

help.

Answer 1

this sounds great.

Answer 2

Keep everything in one tense, preferably present, and you are good to go.

Answer 3

Sounds good.

Answer 4

Well I saw one grammatical error for now I think. Third paragraph, first line, aren't you using past tense for the rest of the example?

Answer 5

i like it ...its beautiful :)...good work and keep it up :)

Answer 6

You have a few more present tenses in there from my skimming. You might want to check the grammars.

Answer 7

the only thing i saw wrong was what wolfe said im still looking

Answer 8

Well the line about Napoleon.

Answer 9

mabey say The sheep "for example," were his most important tools throughout the novel.

Answer 10

Well now I'm seeing that you're talking about a story. Then you might want to make sure you're using the right tenses for telling a historical fact, and for reviewing a story. Be sure ti me consistent.

Answer 11

oh its about a story...i feel dumb lol