Question

Use temporal transitions to revise the following paragraph. You may need to create additional details or information. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Leah grabbed her purse and got on the bus. She pulled out her phone to text her friend. Someone on the bus asked her about her phone. The bus arrived at the mall, and Leah got out. She had forgotten her purse!

Answer 1

Stuck Without Luck -

Answer 2

Temporal Transitions that Show Relationship
with reference to together with in the same way
in comparison likewise coupled with
moreover correspondingly with regard to

Temporal Transitions that Show Sequence or a Shift in Time or Setting
for the time being simultaneously first of all
earlier meanwhile in time
by the way in the distance over there

Temporal Transitions that Build Suspense
unexpectedly in a flash before I knew it
suddenly shockingly out of the blue
at once all of a sudden little by little

Answer 3

Oh great - OS is Orange again LOL

Answer 4

Time slots, eh?
Break down the paragraph:
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Leah grabbed her purse and got on the bus.

She pulled out her phone to text her friend.

Someone on the bus asked her about her phone.

The bus arrived at the mall, and Leah got out.

She had forgotten her purse!
```
Ignore the weird \(LaTex\) highlighting.

So they are asking you to input time shifts, or at least show them.

Let us do sentence one:
Leah grabbed her purse and \(\color{red}{simultaneously}\) got on the bus. (That may not be the best term grammar wise to use but basically all we want is to show time shifts and such.)

Sentence two & three:
She pulled out her phone to text her friend.
Meanwhile she was on the bus, she decided to suddenly text her friend, she pulled out her phone before she knew it some one has suddenly started to ask her about her phone!

Sentence four & five:
The bus arrived at the mall, and Leah got out.
She had forgotten her purse!

The bus had finally arrived at the mall, out of the blue a mass group of people rushed for the exit, unexpectedly the person she was talking to about her phone had left. She briefly looked around to see if she could find the person, but unsurprisingly she did not, she decided to go find him, before she realized the situation the bus had driven off with her purse.

Ugh, the grammar I hate myself, oh well I tried.
I suggest you revise that, it isn't much work all they want are phrases or transitions that deal with time.

Answer 5

Oh wow *-* THIS HELPED A BUNCH! THANK YOU SO MUCH!

Answer 6

\(\huge\color{CHOOSE}{\frak{You~Gotta~Love~LaTex}}\) LOL

Answer 7

Leah grabbed her purse and got on the bus. Then she sat down and pulled out her phone to text her friend. Looking around her - The bus seemed to be empty. She felt a bit worried - But her friends messages kept her a occupied. Then - Out of the blue - A boy came out of nowhere! Leah was shocked! Not only did the boy come out of nowhere - But he sat right by her! Not knowing who the boy was - Leah began to sweat and turn pale. But it seemed that the boy only wanted to ask her about her phone! A sigh of relief for Leah. They talked for what seemed like years - About the phone - About school - And about themselves! Shockingly - It looks like the boys name was Max - Just like Leah's brothers name! At first Leah was quite scared - But knowing more about Max made her feel at ease.
Then - The bus finally arrived at the mall - And Leah got out. She waved goodbye to Max who waved goodbye to her. As the bus got further and further away - Leah noticed something! She had forgotten her purse!

Answer 8

Yup, seems good.

Answer 9

THANKS SO MUCH!
\(\huge\color{CHOOSE}{\frak{Have~A~Wonderful~Day!}}\)