Question

is the grammar, punctuation, and spelling okay in the story below?

Answer 1

One sunny morning in Florida, two boys named Dan Clark and Christopher Watson were getting ready for a Circus that was taking place at the North Cove Park. North Cove Park was a beautiful park filled with luscious green trees and bright red hibiscus. Both of them had brown eyes and brown hair, and Christopher was taller than Dan by an inch. They got on they’re blue bikes and rode off to the Circus. It was about 20 minutes in bike time to get to it. Their trip was very pretty, though. Mrs. Clove was baking bread for the Circus which made the air sweet and crisp. Mr. Yorkshire was making fresh popcorn for the Circus. Everyone except the boys had something to do in the Circus. They felt left out but atleast they could watch and not have the stress of making sure they were doing stuff right.

They decided to take a short cut path to save some time. Once they got to the path,they looked all around as they drove. There were flowers and trees everywhere. Birds were singing, trees were rustling from the breeze, and the little dirt path had a very smooth ride. Dan closed his eyes and smiled, it was a beautiful sunny day. Christopher brought his bike to a sudden stop, as did Dan. There were little ducklings and their mother waddling past them and he wasn’t paying attention. They stopped right in the nick of time. After they waddled past them they began to ride again.

Finally, when they reached their destination, they saw clown applying their makeup, elephants eating the grass on earth’s floor, monkey’s laughing in their cages, and zebras sitting along side the clown car.

When suddenly the ring master called out, “The zebra handlers are missing!”.

The two boys looked at each other.

“That can’t be good.” Dan said.

“It’s not! My friend told me that the circus always needs handlers for the animals so that way they can stay controlled!” Christopher said.

“Uh, oh.” Dan said anxiously.

They parked their bikes under a great oak tree and ran over to the ring master.

“They circus can’t happen without the zebra handlers!” The ring master yelled out to the rushing people and animals.

“But the show must go on!” Christopher said to the ring master.

“I’m sorry son, but we need the handlers.” He said politely.

“What if we help? I have horses. Maybe I can handle and lead them however you need me too.” Dan looked up at the ring master.

“That just might work!” He shouted with a horray. “The circus is saved!”

“Maybe. I need to see first. How many zebras are there?”

“4.”

“Okay. I can take two and Christopher ca take two. Perfect!” Dan said.

“I’ll take you to where they are.” The ring master said.

After he showed them where they were, the ring master showed them how to hold the reins and also where to walk them when they get in the tent. At first it was hard to get the zebras calm, but they finally got the them to trust them. Once it was time to start, they lead them just how the ring master said to and had a fun time. They even got to watch the acrobats in the front row.

When they play concluded everyone stood up and applauded the circus. They made sure that the zebras were placed in their stables correctly and headed out with a good bye. They waved to everyone and then sat down at the bench right next to where they parked their bikes. They were talking about all the stuff they did that day, and then Christopher remembered that they weren't the only ones left out, they were in the circus. The both laughed and smiled. Then they got on their bikes and rode to Dan’s house for supper. They told Dan’s mom about the whole day with joy.

Answer 2

There isn't anything wrong with punctuation and spelling but you start out as a narrative and then then switch to the two boys in first person instead of sticking with a narrative. You jump around without explain certain characters. I would change the transition of finally and you should always spell numbers. 20- twenty