Question

What do you guys think of this??
Sleep
Cold, bitter

To one it's where they dream happy
to others it's where nightmares haunt

To the living...it's rest
but to the dead it's never ending

Sleep can take you
so you'll never wake

Sleep has it's days
where it's nice enough to let you stay

it wants to trick you
it wants you to see its good side

For one day you might never wake
and you might never get to say goodbye...

Answer 1

oh sorry i read it and liked it but forgot to say that i did so ...
i really like it

Answer 2

lol it's okay xP thankss

Answer 3

welcomez

Answer 4

AWESOME! - medal?

Answer 5

Thanks!

Answer 6

lol no prob.

Answer 7

Wow it's good :)

Answer 8

It is really detailed and has amazeing structure and emotion, and mood, and tone.

Answer 9

I think it's really good! It gets you think, however I think it could use a little fine toning. Not much though because like I said its really good. I think with something this strong of a topic... that you might want to use some different vocab. I felt like your diction was very repetitive. However I do realize that this is a poem and that may have been your intent; if it was I apologize. I really do think this is an awesome poem. I just know that I like for people to tell me the little details that can be improved. maybe that's just me. Know that I am not in anyway criticizing you just trying to help another fellow writer out. Excellent job keep it up