Question

ITT: Critique my work. It's a short story for my literature class. Go to my last comment with an attachment.

Answer 1

It's unfinished btw

Answer 2

@Compassionate

Answer 3

Are you allowed to have all upper-case letters like:

“EMMA’S A 20 YEAR OLD GIRL. IN GREECE. ANCIENT GREECE. Her situation takes precedence!” yelled Olivia. “What is so hard to understand about that?”

I thought the exclamation mark already means you are yelling/excited about something.

Answer 4

I dunno. It's added emphasis, and I don't think there's anything wrong with having it in dialogue, but I'll ask my teacher about that tomorrow.

Answer 5

Okay cool, other than that I think it is good, though English is not my forte so probably wait around for someone else :-).

Answer 6

K :P
It's a continuation of a 9th grade history project that my friend and I did, but I'm not sure if I still have any of the old scripts.

Answer 7

New

Answer 8

I hate it, it's bad, go back to english 101.

Answer 9

joking i didnt read yet

Answer 10

hue. Lemme know what you think when you're done tho ;)

Answer 11

"20 year old girl"

Answer 12

wat

Answer 13

interesting keep going... i like so far curious about what will happen as the story progresses.

Answer 14

Thanks :3
I kinda have to keep going though. No choice :p

Answer 15

thats great then

Answer 16

Yes indeedly doo. Shouldn't be too long before more gets added on tho.