Question

Not my best poem, by far. Just something i threw together. I think it's kind of jumpy I guess. Opinions please. Constructive criticism is encouraged. Please and thank you.

Answer 1

Alone

Standing here not knowing what to do
I turned around, looking only for you
You don’t know what it’s like
To see you everyday
To have spent so much time with you
And still feel like you know nothing at all
To sit with a group of friends
But not be there with them
To feel like there’s always a barrier
Between you and the rest of world
To look at your best friend
Knowing even they don’t know your secret
The one person you want to tell,
Is no where to be found
They left before, without regret
To know they don’t care
I die a little every day
Because you’re no longer there.

Answer 2

Oh, that was really nice Bakon.~ <3

This actually relates to my irl life so much, very nice. c:

Answer 3

Well thank you Chib!!!!

Answer 4

This is great man.!

Answer 5

Tank Yous!!!

Answer 6

Nothing i should change or add?

Answer 7

It's good

Answer 8

That was reallly good!

Answer 9

Thank you!

Answer 10

i love it keep up the writting :)

Answer 11

Looks great~!

Answer 12

This is Good. (:

Answer 13

it super

Answer 14

you she love it

Answer 15

you should love it

Answer 16

LOVE IT!!! great job on this :D :) :D

Answer 17

The poem is very nice :)

However... poetry is a form of literature.
Therefore it should be posted in the literature or writing section, not music.
Just a reminder :)

Answer 18

<3

Answer 19

Okay @thomaster Thanks for the reminder.