This is the first thing I've ever wrote, so don't be too hard on me lol. :P I'm wanting this to be a love story (figures). Are these chapters gripping? Do you like the characters? All feedback is appreciated.

To get to the second chapter, scroll down a little past the text, below the icons, and you'll see ''Chapter Two''.

http://www.wattpad.com/41711915-untitled

Thank you! :D

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This is the first thing I've ever wrote, so don't be too hard on me lol. :P I'm wanting this to be a love story (figures). Are these chapters gripping? Do you like the characters? All feedback is appreciated. 

To get to the second chapter, scroll down a little past the text, below the icons, and you'll see ''Chapter Two''. 

http://www.wattpad.com/41711915-untitled 

Thank you! :D

turingtest · Answer

Welcome to OpenSTudy. Actually, this section of the site is for feedback about the site itself, not creative works; sorry. Please post this in the English section. http://openstudy.com/study#/groups/English

secret66 · Answer

I think it should be in Writing section? O.o

primeralph · Answer

And I actually like it (you should feel good that I do). The main problem is that in the bid to sound dramatic (and/or poetic) you're making some punctuation errors.
I only read the first chapter.