Question

Hello everyone,

I would love it if you would please read this. I am a poet/author/song writer. My name is Snow E. Roark. Please read this poem below. I am adding it to my book, which I will be publishing. Anyone interested in knowing when I get my book published private message me and I will give you more information. Please feel free to comment. Nothing rude and negative, please. Do criticize, but please be kind when you do. Thank you for taking the time to read this.

-Snow E. Roark

Answer 1

Worrier of Love & Life
By: Snow E. Roark

Looking in the distance, all I see is a battle field.
Blood and Bodies,
Scatter the Earth.
Everywhere I go.
Choosing the perfect,
Weapon.
I started smokin' ,
Today ain't over yet.
Cheatin' ain't,
No crime.
Ain't no rule;
Ain't worth breaking.
We'll make our plight.
We're no hero.
We're just us.
It's your turn.
Settling the final score.
That's what you get,
For letting your,
Heart win.

Answer 2

If you think I should add let me know and I will. :) Everyone's opinion counts.

Answer 3

@Destinymasha @Luigi0210 @Luisdabroski @CrazyCountryGirl @Nurali @TQKMB @AravindG @kennyj123 @countryboy2 @Compassionate

Answer 4

This is really good Snow.

Answer 5

Thank you. :) This one has taken me the longest to write. I'm glad you like it

Answer 6

@LastDayWork @adrynicoleb @timaashorty @zepdrix

Answer 7

@Squirrels @sadaholic19

Answer 8

Good job! :D

Answer 9

Amazing! Well written[: Also, Good luck with your book!

Answer 10

Thank you :-D

Answer 11

I am no expert..but I do like it very much ^_^

Answer 12

Thank you so very much everyone:) I will post more later on. My confidence in this book is now 200%+ thanks to ya'll :D

Answer 13

Good Job! @SnowCrystal

Answer 14

Thank you

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@CO_oLBoY @arabpride @drummerboyrevived @DullJackel09 @secret66 @rose21

Answer 16

WOW ~ im impressed ~ great job ~ soo much meanin hidden within ~ brilliant ~ u r gonna be somthin rlly great hun *^.^*

Answer 17

thanks :D

Answer 18

^_^

Answer 19

IMPRESSIVE....

Answer 20

Thanks

Answer 21

Ooo, this was interesting! I like it [:

Answer 22

You're Welcome ~.^

Answer 23

Thanks @IJustWantToGraduate

Answer 24

good job

Answer 25

thanks

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@beccaboo333 @amistre64 @DollyAcquah @evilbrand97 @EvanEllis @Kilorion @ikram002p @LadyKatsaTheGraceling @linda3 @Mchilds15 @random231 @RockStar02 @Sparrowhawk69 @stonewoods @Taylor<3sRin @Yuba @Xmoses1 @Zarkon @zendaya-replay-guy

Answer 27

Awesome! <3333333

Answer 28

LOVE IT!!!

Answer 29

lol.. u lied to me yesterday ..saying that u r not god at literature :P... tbh i didnt lie to u... my literature knowledge is no better than that of a small kid.. but even i can c through ur poem like its pure glass.... NICE .. BRILLIANT... and i got no words to describe :)... u sure r full of talents ... :) Keep up the good work and someday.. someday soon u could become a shining diamond !!

Answer 30

I really love your poem. Keep up the good work and never stop writing. :) But as for the spam tagging.... please no mass tagging! Thank you!! But- like i said before your a beutiful writer :)

Answer 31

she's already a diamond @isuru

Answer 32

Thanks guys and @linda3 I didnt know that it was spam tagging

Answer 33

yah u shud add this its awesome @SnowCrystal !!!!!!!

Answer 34

Really good job Snow :D

Answer 35

Thanks :D
@random231 I'm planing on it :D my book is called Warrior of Love & Life

Answer 36

oh! and a suggestion to your poem. It would easier to read it if you wrote it in a different format. like here I'll give you an example...

The Puppet Master

How can one laugh
How can one smile
Your life is dangling
By a white thread

Who's the Puppet master
Who's the director
The red curtains are pulled
And you have places to go

The show is just a show
A life is just a life
Your hand moves right
Your foot moves left

Do you even know
Where you are going
What you are doing

How your life
is dangling by a white thread
You want to speak
You want to scream

But who is there to hear you
behind that painted smile?
The crowd laughs
at whatever you do

The puppet master smiles
an evil smile
as he dangles you above

The show has ended
your placed in the glass box
for no one to touch
except the puppet master

How can one laugh
How can one smile
When your life is dangling
by a white thread?

you said your a song writer correct? When singing, there's rhythm right? It's the same with writing! :) You have to have a rhythm but that doesn't mean it has to rhyme- it could be free writing. When I write I usually don't use " , " or " . " because it an break the flow of the poem. But everyones different :) Just discover and find your own style of writing. I wish you the best of luck.

Answer 37

breaking up the words into four lines or three helps. But there are all kinds of poems out there in this world :)

Answer 38

Thanks that is some awasome advice and ya I am just starting out with song writting my friend @HarleyQuinnlovesjoker is helping me with a melody

Answer 39

It's great! ;)

Answer 40

Thanks

Answer 41

ANytime :D

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@kennyj123

Answer 43

great

Answer 44

thx

Answer 45

really good

Answer 46

thanks

Answer 47

its really worth an applause :) Good job

Answer 48

Thank you so very much

Answer 49

Im a little late but amazing song :)

Answer 50

Thank you it is perfectly okay better late than never :) I will be adding this to my book soon

Answer 51

My poetry book

Answer 52

Oh yeah whats it going to be called

Answer 53

Warrior of Love & Life is the name of the book and i just though i had to come up with a poem with the same name

Answer 54

Hmm ok well i make sure to look for it then thanks

Answer 55

welcome I will be lookin for a publisher so i can publish it asap

Answer 56

@SnowCrystal
You are a amazing writer and I can already tell that you will have an amazing book out. ^_^ I'm going to tell you what I TELL JUST ABOUT EVERYONE. Check out this site.
www.allpoetry.com
I'm on there (charitybugg) I look forward to reading some more of your pieces. :)

Answer 57

Thank you I appreciate it :)

Answer 58

amazing :)

Answer 59

thank you