Question

So I'm trying to get my thesis to match up with my essay prompt, but I've been told that I can strengthen it. Any tips on how I might do that in general?

Answer 1

https://writingcenter.unc.edu/handouts/thesis-statements/ This should help.

Answer 2

Prompt: Typical survival skills include the ability to hunt, build shelter, and locate water. Snowman doesn’t seem to possess these skills (or if he does, he is not an expert.) So how does he survive? What unexpected or unusual survival skills does Snowman use to stay alive, and would these skills help someone in our modern society survive an outbreak or plague?

Thesis: All of these skills contribute to Snowman’s survival, and these skills would be very useful to someone in our modern society if an outbreak or plague were to happen; if Snowman’s skills were perfected.

I figured that I should post this for more evaluation since I am currently sitting here writing my essay now. I've got 7 main points to make with this essay and hopefully that should reach the 4 page limit. I listed the skills displayed by him in the book, but is there anything else that I can do with my thesis to strengthen it? I personally do not feel it is as direct as it could be to answering the prompt, but I would like my some feedback. I personally feel that it is very elementary.

Answer 3

Hmm

Answer 4

Perhaps you can expand on the skills or the
perfection?

Answer 5

Like this will give an overview of what lies ahead for the rest of the paper.

Answer 6

So each key point in thesis should be elaborated upon.

Answer 7

So how does he survive?

Answer 8

You should answer that in the thesis.

Answer 9

Each question should be answered in the thesis actually.

Answer 10

So 1) How does he survive? 2)What unconventional methods does he use to survive? 3)How would these survival skills help those in the modern society in the case of a plague?

Answer 11

Directly answer these questions in a clear and concise manner and you should be fine.