Question

Is this a good hook and Point combined? Can anything be done to improve it?
When the holocaust is shown in film, everything is shown in a different perspective causing every film to have similarities and differences and in which this case occurs in the films "Life is Beautiful" and "Diary of Anne Frank" as a similarity being in how tone was used to discriminate and show hatred towards the Jews

Answer 1

1. What three specific items do you see as strengths in this writing piece?

The piece was not quite a full paragraph but I did like that he came up with an example of books being banned on how to make bombs as a result from the Boston bombing.



2. What is the overall writing piece about? (Be specific.)

It was about the banning of books and he used the example of the Boston Bombing and how they banned books teaching people how to build bombs.



3. What are two specific questions that you wish the author had answered about the topic?

I wish he would of answered who “they” was when he stated how they banned books.
I also wish he would have clarified who the people were when he said banned books teaching people how to build bombs.



4. Identify three weak verbs that could be made more active, and suggest replacements.
I would change took and replace it with removed, and think with reflect, and build with construct.

Answer 2

grammer check please