Question

What were the benefits and drawbacks of having a railroad run through your city in the 1800s?

I need to write a 5 Paragraph essay about this. I already have the benefits and Drawbacks, I just need help wording this.

Benefits:
- Faster Transportation of goods (medicine, food, cargo, ect.)
- Shorter Trips
- More connections; socialism

Drawbacks:
- Pollution
- Immigrants who built theme died from labor
- Safety issues
- Sickness could spread from town to town

Answer 1

Here is my first paragraph

Answer 2

In the late 1700's to the early 1800's the only way to travel was by horse and by boat. This made lots of things very difficult, that is until the invention of the loco-motive. In 1804 the steam powered engine was made possible by Richard Trevithick, but was later perfected and made for railway service by George Stephenson.

Answer 3

thats my opening paragraph, But I have no idea how to put all of my information into 4 new paragraphs.

Answer 4

You think you can give me some information about what you are writing about?

Answer 5

My prompt is: What were the benefits and drawbacks of having a railroad run through your city in the 1800s?

Now I have all of that information.. (the benefits and drawbacks) I just dont know how to word it.

Benefits:
- Faster Transportation of goods (medicine, food, cargo, ect.)
- Shorter Trips
- More connections; socialism

Drawbacks:
- Pollution
- Immigrants who built theme died from labor
- Safety issues
- Sickness could spread from town to town

Answer 6

Another drawback was the criminals trains attracted (especially out in the west). This was because trains often carried money and/or gold.

example: butch cassidy and the sundance kid

Answer 7

Oh, would that mean that criminal rates were higher if you had a railway running through your town?

Answer 8

I'm not sure if the crime rates were higher, but usually having more people compete over scarce resources leads to higher rates of violence

Answer 9

Having a train coming through town means the population is larger (people are arriving by train to settle there)

Answer 10

Oh my gosh, how am I ever going to put all of this into a 5 paragraph essay! >.<

Answer 11

You don't have to cover all the fine details, just talk about them broadly

Answer 12

Is my first paragraph ok? Like how, do I begin a paragraph? I'm so stuck.

Answer 13

How about another benefit such as overnight travel, this way you don't have to stay in hotels and such.

Answer 14

I have no clue how to bring up the topics at hand, and them smush them into 4 more paragraphs.

Answer 15

the whole aim of this paper is to discuss pros and cons of having a train run through the town

Answer 16

@iambatman This was in the 1800's, were there hotels then? o-O

Answer 17

so you have to state that somewhere in your opening paragraph

Answer 18

Oh ok, Let me revise my opening paragraph then hold on.

Answer 19

Oh 1800s, yeah just do what Jim's been saying then.

Answer 20

So is this the 5 paragraph essay where you need introduction, 3 body, and a conclusion or what?

Answer 21

I would do it like this


paragraph 1: state what you are going to talk about (have a short intro of trains and such, and travel before that)
paragraph 2: talk about a few pros
paragraph 3: talk about a few cons
paragraph 4: maybe state if the pros outweigh the cons (or vice versa). Overall, is it worth it to have a train coming through town? yes or no
paragraph 5: conclusion (wrap up and summarize everything you wrote about)

Answer 22

There were lots of advantages and disadvantages to having a railroad run through your town. In the late 1700's to the early 1800's the only way to travel was by horse and by boat. This made lots of things very difficult, that is until the invention of the loco-motive. In 1804 the steam powered engine was made possible by Richard Trevithick, but was later perfected and made for railway service by George Stephenson.

^^ Opening Paragraph ^^

Is that good?

Answer 23

for paragraph 4, you can pretend you're in a town council meeting and you're trying to convince the council members to vote a certain way

Answer 24

Yeah, @iambatman

Answer 25

So Paragraph 2 I should bring up all of the Cons? How do I bring it up though? Like, How do I start a paragraph?

Answer 26

Well you should connect all the paragraphs to each other somehow.

Answer 27

Maybe say "despite the advantages, there were many problems with having a train coming through the town"

That's not very creative I know, but I'm sure you can improve on that

Answer 28

Better than what I could have come up with! Here, left me get a rough draft going and I'll tell you guys, it should only take less than 5 minutes.

Answer 29

There were lots of good things that would come out of having a railroad in your city. You would not only have the ability to create economic opportunities, but social ones as well. Your town would also most likely get goods like medicine, food, and other cargo faster rather than if everything was to be shipped to you by horse or by train. You also had more of a chance of moving away and getting to your destination faster.

Answer 30

Is that good? Does It displays the Pros well or do I need to add something?

Answer 31

@iambatman

Answer 32

That's a good start

Answer 33

Should I add more to that paragraph and make it longer?

Answer 34

oh and the part "...faster rather than if everything was to be shipped to you by horse or by train" makes no sense

how is a train faster than a train? Assuming we're talking about the same basic train

Answer 35

OH MY GOSH! type-o my bad

Answer 36

Its supposed to say 'horse or by boat'

Answer 37

I gotcha

and you could maybe expand on the economic opportunities. Say how trains running through the town create jobs and that helps raise the standard of living for those people

Answer 38

Thats not a bad idea! So like this?:

Answer 39

There were lots of good things that came out of having a railroad in your town. You would have the ability to create economic opportunities, and social opportunities. Trains running through your town would also create jobs, and raise the standard of living for people. your town would also most likely get things like medicine, food, and other cargo faster than by the usual horse and boat. You would also have a much faster travel time if you were to travel somewhere.

Answer 40

Is that good Jim?

Answer 41

@jim_thompson5910

Answer 42

that sounds good

Answer 43

be sure to change

"...standard of living for people. your town would..."

to

"...standard of living for people. Your town would..."

Answer 44

OH! Thank you! i think I got this now, I'll post the final thing when I'm done and have you read over it to see if It is ok.

THANK YOU <3 <3 <3

Answer 45

ok sounds good

Answer 46

DONE

Answer 47

@jim_thompson5910

Answer 48

In the late 1700's to the early 1800's the only way to travel was by horse and by boat. This made lots of things very difficult, that is until the invention of the loco-motive. In 1804 the steam-powered engine was made possible by Richard Trevithick, but was later perfected and made for railway service by George Stephenson.


There were lots of good things that came out of having a railroad in your town. You would have the ability to create economic opportunities, and social opportunities. Trains running through your town would also create jobs, and raise the standard of living for people. Your town would also most likely get things like medicine, food, and other cargo faster than by the usual horse and boat. You would also have a much faster travel time if you were to travel somewhere.


Despite the advantages, there were also many problems with having a train coming through the town. Things like pollution was a very bad side affect to train use. Maintaining the railroad tracks was also a serious problem, because the iron would often rust. Safety, of course was a HUGE problem, sparks from the trains wood and coal fires burned cars, and boilers exploded. Being that the trains were also extremely loud, that was also a problem for people living near by.


Keep in mind that most of these job opportunities were often taken by Chinese, German, and Irish immigrants. They often fell victim of racial abuse, and many died because of the extreme working conditions and the hard labor.


As you can see, there were many disadvantages, as there were advantages. So is all of this worth having a railroad in your town? I would say so. The Transcontinental Railroad System played a huge part in the industrial revolution and the advancing of America. I would be honored to have a railroad in my town.

Answer 49

Please please please look over this

Answer 50

"side affect" should be "side effect"

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I would write

"Safety, of course was a HUGE problem, sparks from the trains wood and coal fires burned cars, and boilers exploded"

as

"Safety of course was a HUGE problem since sparks from the train's wood and coal fires burned cars and boilers exploded"

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I would write more in paragraph 4. Maybe go into a bit more detail of the horrible working conditions or what these workers faced (from other people).

Answer 51

Ohhhh I see! Thanks! I'll revise it.

Answer 52

Other than that, I think it looks really good

Answer 53

Thank you!!! ^-^

Answer 54

I would get a second opinion though (I'm more a math guy, than an english guy)

Answer 55

it's okay, this is for a history teacher, not an LA teacher. :3

Answer 56

I see, but it's still a good idea to have a language person look it over

Answer 57

Your right.. do you know anybody who could? Could you tag some people for me please? ;-;

Answer 58

It seems like everybody on here is a math guy, lol.

Answer 59

yeah I really only know math people in the math section

Answer 60

Thats okay, I'll tag some friends.

Answer 61

@iPwnBunnies Can you be any help? I need someone to look over my essay.

Answer 62

Alright

Answer 63

You want me to read it? ^~^
And proofread, or just give me opinion?

Answer 64

Proofread, and give me an opinion as well please! I need an A. xD

Answer 65

Did ya read it? ^-^

Answer 66

Sorry, it took a while. Had to do other stuff. @_@
Yes, it's ok. It's a bit short though, I think. :3 I'm not sure what your instructions are.
But yeah, I would also be honored to have a railroad in my town. V_V

Answer 67

Here are my instructions:
Select a question from the list of questions above.

View the How to Conduct Research tutorial.

Visit your library or virtual library to find answers to the question.

Complete any additional online research necessary to answer the question.

Write a five-paragraph essay in which you answer the question and provide at least three examples of your research to support your answer.

Answer 68

Mmm, ok. Welp. Your essay is fine. c:

Answer 69

Thanks! i'll turn it in. THANK YOU EVERYBODY WHO HELPED ME <3 <3 <3 <3 <3

@iambatman @iPwnBunnies @jim_thompson5910

Answer 70

♥

Answer 71

Lol I didn't do much, but np :p

Answer 72

That was GREAT!!! Accurate information...based on facts supporting the entire essay.. perfect structure!! I'd give this paper an 'A' myself if I were your teacher!! Good Job!! I think you're ready to hand it in! *^.^* ~And sorry for taking so long.. my internet connection failed .. >.< again!

Answer 73

It's ok! Thanks! ^-^ I turned it in, I'll tell you what my teacher says about it. LOL