Question

I just wrote this poem for english can i get your opinions ? criticism is excepted

Answer 1

I’m an American!!!
Proud am I to be,
Proud am I to say,
I am an American,
I live it day by day,
How grand the opportunity to bow my head and pray,
Have no man the ability to take the right away,
Amazing does the flag pole sound,
While standing on freedom ground,
A beauty is the flag to see,
Symbolizing we are free,
How thankful am I for the men who signed their name,
Oh not for their fortune,
Oh not for their fame,
Oh not so the world would remember their name,
Oh they did it for you,
Oh they did it for me,
They did it for our liberty,
Blessed I am to say,
I have soldiers to protect me,
No matter where I stand,
No matter where I lay,
No matter where I take my wife,
And children out to play,
Oh how proud I am to celebrate,
Our independence day.

Answer 2

the lines "oh they did it for you" and "oh they did it for me, the "oh"'s make it sound like a song and kind of awkward. keep the oh in the "oh they did it for you" but the oh in the next line, change the oh to thus so its "thus, they did it for me." or keep it the way it is. it makes it seem more poetic, hoever this is just my opinion. ti is up to you.

Answer 3

thank you you ... :)