Okay so my sister wrote this and she wants some opinions. She is open to constructive criticism. It's not done yet.

This may be cliche
But he came off as charming
more sweet than you'd think
He had a real heart,
he's more than just ink
At the end of my story you'll love
him too
but for now
let's stick with just us two

Question

Okay so my sister wrote this and she wants some opinions. She is open to constructive criticism. It's not done yet.


This may be cliche
But he came off as charming
more sweet than you'd think
He had a real heart,
he's more than just ink
At the end of my story you'll love
him too
but for now
let's stick with just us two

aurorab · Answer

it's good so far, but i'd have to read it when finished to understand fully