Question

I want to tell you so bad,
But something just backs me down.
I cant help but to be sad,
Why should I frown.
When I talk to you I smile,
but yet when I go to tell you something.
Its like I have to hit redial,
because you don't realize I have been thinking.

Answer 1

@Wolfboy @AngelWilliams16 @ARMYRANGERS @backwoods15 @camerondoherty @Whitemonsterbunny17

Answer 2

This one was good yet not my favorite. I think that you could have made some effort here in there to increase how much the problem was staged. Also, use some more complex structure, so instead of saying smile use a different compound of words to explain the feeling of happiness. Maybe even use the word happiness and with a more indulging verb. Seldom does that come across with a good rhyme, but when it does it is outstanding.

Answer 3

Keep up the good work though @Marco,Phillip

Answer 4

I realize that you seem to have a deep connection with a melancholy past. Is that true?

Answer 5

alright thanks

Answer 6

lol I dont mean to put you down, I see great potential in you, I am just trying to help you get it out

Answer 7

no no itsokay

Answer 8

lol ok