Question

How do I make this paragraph less vague in my essay?
Eventually however CGI became more widespread and used more frequently within TV and film. It allowed filmmakers to pull off shots and action sequences without the risk of harm to the actors or paying for damages, not to mention the fact that it is indeed cheaper to produce a twelve foot t-rex with a computer program than it is to create an animatronic puppet.

Answer 1

The use of an example at the end, where it is now, doesn't quite fit. If you'd just like to make the paragraph more concise and more easily understood for the audience, I'd say your best bet there is to either remove it (as it does sound awkward, generally) or put it in it's own sentence with a smoother transition leading into it, such as, "The advantages don't end here; it shows cost-effectiveness in many different ways, an example being..." Good luck. :)