Question

Can someone critique my college essay please? (:

Answer 1

Critique??

Answer 2

What does it mean..??

Answer 3

I can check for grammar mistakes or Spellings if you can post your Essay here..

Answer 4

After my family, what is written there?? Have you used any quotation marks or comma there??

I am not seeing it properly in my pc..

Answer 5

My Family's ??

Answer 6

You have really written it well..

But according to me, there are one or two mistakes, but I am not sure whether they are really mistakes or not..

May we discuss??

Answer 7

First line:

My Family's history and culture HAS ??

According to me, History and Culture are two things and they must be counted as Plural..

Answer 8

Am I true in saying that??

Answer 9

Can you explain one more line to me? I actually did not get it properly..

Answer 10

Nevermind, I got that.. :)

Let me check once again if there is any mistake..

Answer 11

In the first sentence or line, you never mentioned that you are living in America..

So, what does 'here" mean??

Answer 12

My family���s history and culture has significantly impacted who I am today. Both my parents are immigrants who came here from Iran.

Just read it and tell me how one will come to know about "here" here in your Essay?

Answer 13

You can also use:

Both my parents are immigrants who came here in America from Iran..

Or:

Both my parents are immigrants who came to America from Iran..

Answer 14

That is good.. :)

Answer 15

That is true @Supernova_Sonntag there must be 'to' and not 'too'..

Answer 16

Yes my mistake lol disregard what i said

Answer 17

@wade123 you are right there..

Answer 18

That is why I deleted it :)

Answer 19

When I read it first, I also got the same doubt there but then I came back to my senses.. :P

Answer 20

Yes it is, but I have one more doubt..

Answer 21

Sorry for so much of doubts.. :)

Answer 22

As I was growing up, my parents always took my siblings and I to Iran so that we wouldn���t forget about our Persian culture..

How true I am in saying that:

As I was growing up, my parents used to take my siblings and I to Iran so that we wouldn���t forget about our Persian culture

Answer 23

I am not sure in this, but just asking..

Answer 24

Its good (also very interesting). I just want to point out that in the end the word "life" is used twice very close together and I feel it would be better to take the second one out and just say that you use the two cultures everyday. Of course, this is a little nitpicky.

Answer 25

What you say @Supernova_Sonntag ?

Answer 26

It is all good, that is all from my side.. :)

Answer 27

Agreed^