Question

Scholarship Essay help?

Answer 1

@ganeshie8

Answer 2

I'm applying for the NROTC Scholarship and I'm having trouble with my essay. I need a way to make this sound less about me in a sense...

Answer 3

Topic: Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Marine Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the lessons you have learned. (Limit 2500 characters)

1st Paragraph:
I want to become an Officer in the United States Marine Corps because I feel that the Marines have everything that I would want in a career. Through the Marine Corps, I can intensify my strength, both mentally and physically as well as improving my leadership skills. I feel that being a Marine Officer would be the best option to enhance my strength because it would provide me with the most rigorous physical training out of all of the branches of the United States Armed Forces. As for my mental strength, there are many different educational opportunities to help me get through college.

Answer 4

If you want to make it sound more advanced, you could always go to www.thesaurus.com to look for alternate or more appealing words. The grammar in that paragraph looked fine to me! There weren't any errors, but you could replace "help me get through college" with "to help me accomplish my goal of completing college." I don't know, it just sounds a little better lol. Just tag me if you need any more help, and I will help you!

Answer 5

@sunshine447