The Orphan and the Cab
By: Story8750
Prologue:
"He held her hand tightly as she screamed through the pain. He tried to keep her calm and told her she was doing great. Telling her to breathe and never left her side. Two hours of this went by and a little girl was brought into the world. Just as soon as she was brought into it, the doctors came in and said she had been taken out. Silence filled the room and both became numb. From their on months of crying and self blame filled their once happy home. Both in a state of shock, they stopped trying and grew very distant over the years."

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The Orphan and the Cab
By: ﻿Story8750
Prologue:
"He held her hand tightly as she screamed through the pain. He tried to keep her calm and told her she was doing great. Telling her to breathe and never left her side. Two hours of this went by and a little girl was brought into the world. Just as soon as she was brought into it, the doctors came in and said she had been taken out. Silence filled the room and both became numb. From their on months of crying and self blame filled their once happy home. Both in a state of shock, they stopped trying and grew very distant over the years."

anonymous · Answer

Just checking if this looks better ^.^
 @madmik

anonymous · Answer

@undeadknight26 , what do you think?

undeadknight26 · Answer

It...it looks interesting...

anonymous · Answer

Lol xD

anonymous · Answer

Lol ok..
"Telling her to breathe and never left her side." is a fragment. You can instead say something like, "Telling her to breathe, he never left her side." or "He told her to breathe and never left her side."
"From their on months of crying and self blame filled their once happy home." 
"their" should be "there" because you do not need a possessive form. Use their when referring to a group's belongings as in "their couch" or "their baby." 
Other than that, it sounds great! Keep up the good work! :)