I'm not to good at this so please give me in put on what you think.

My arm is bleeding
And my mind is screaming
But my heart is still beating

The lights go black
Then i'm on my back
But my heart is still beating

I grab the knife
To take my life
My heart finaly stopped beating

Question

I'm not to good at this so please give me in put on what you think.

My arm is bleeding
And my mind is screaming
             But my heart is still beating

The lights go black
Then i'm on my back
             But my heart is still beating

I grab the knife
To take my life
            My heart finaly stopped beating

destinycholie · Answer

Really really good

anonymous · Answer

thank you

demonickittenlover · Answer

wow... and you said you were bad.... ;) i love it!!

anonymous · Answer

Thanks hun.... im glad u like it

crissy15 · Answer

i like it, just hate the subject,ive been dead nd came back its not fun

anonymous · Answer

so have i.... just this past year i was dragged by a car and got pushed and face planted doing 90mph

crissy15 · Answer

wow, ithought having a stroke, afew heart attacks ,nd afew doctors wanting to rip u up was bad, not to mention being in coma, were u in coma, omg id feel so lonely now :)!

anonymous · Answer

i have been in a coma before..... i hope it never happens again

crissy15 · Answer

ik, ihope that doesnt happen ever,did u have like a dream, during coma, it was like a fight between life and death to me

anonymous · Answer

As long as you capitalize "I'm", it's beautiful.

ghostgate · Answer

On the very last line apart of the last paragraph you misspelled finally. I just want to point that out. Other than that, nicely done!

anonymous · Answer

Thank you.

demonickittenlover · Answer

-_- grammar nazis

anonymous · Answer

It happens

ghostgate · Answer

Lol - Sorry, but grammar is important. Maybe not as important to everyone, but still.