Question

I'm not to good at this so please give me in put on what you think.


My arm is bleeding
And my mind is screaming
But my heart is still beating

The lights go black
Then i'm on my back
But my heart is still beating

I grab the knife
To take my life
My heart finaly stopped beating

Answer 1

Really really good

Answer 2

thank you

Answer 3

wow... and you said you were bad.... ;) i love it!!

Answer 4

Thanks hun.... im glad u like it

Answer 5

i like it, just hate the subject,ive been dead nd came back its not fun

Answer 6

so have i.... just this past year i was dragged by a car and got pushed and face planted doing 90mph

Answer 7

wow, ithought having a stroke, afew heart attacks ,nd afew doctors wanting to rip u up was bad, not to mention being in coma, were u in coma, omg id feel so lonely now :)!

Answer 8

i have been in a coma before..... i hope it never happens again

Answer 9

ik, ihope that doesnt happen ever,did u have like a dream, during coma, it was like a fight between life and death to me

Answer 10

As long as you capitalize "I'm", it's beautiful.

Answer 11

On the very last line apart of the last paragraph you misspelled finally. I just want to point that out. Other than that, nicely done!

Answer 12

Thank you.

Answer 13

-_- grammar nazis

Answer 14

It happens

Answer 15

Lol - Sorry, but grammar is important. Maybe not as important to everyone, but still.