I'm not to good at this so please give me in put on what you think. My arm is bleeding And my mind is screaming But my heart is still beating The lights go black Then i'm on my back But my heart is still beating I grab the knife To take my life My heart finaly stopped beating
Really really good
wow... and you said you were bad.... ;) i love it!!
Thanks hun.... im glad u like it
i like it, just hate the subject,ive been dead nd came back its not fun
so have i.... just this past year i was dragged by a car and got pushed and face planted doing 90mph
wow, ithought having a stroke, afew heart attacks ,nd afew doctors wanting to rip u up was bad, not to mention being in coma, were u in coma, omg id feel so lonely now :)!
i have been in a coma before..... i hope it never happens again
ik, ihope that doesnt happen ever,did u have like a dream, during coma, it was like a fight between life and death to me
As long as you capitalize "I'm", it's beautiful.
On the very last line apart of the last paragraph you misspelled finally. I just want to point that out. Other than that, nicely done!
-_- grammar nazis
Lol - Sorry, but grammar is important. Maybe not as important to everyone, but still.
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