If I post the link to the rough draft of my essay for english, will someone give me some advice on it please? We have to write a descriptive essay, but my teacher wasn't really specific on it. She said it could be about anything we want and to aim for 3-5 paragraphs. I wrote mine on a day dealing with anxiety, because thats something I struggle with/know a lot about. But I'm not sure if it is actually a descriptive essay? Like is it too much of a story? Not enough description? Should I change the topic? Focus more on one part of the day rather than a whole one? I just don't know.
Hey, that sounds like a great topic! I'll gladly read what you have!
Thank you! I attached the file to the thing here; I hope it works. Its not finished, but it's what I have so far and I have no idea if it's any of what its supposed to be.
Alrighty, do you want me to show you the grammar mistakes, or do you wanna do that yourself?
Yeah, If you don't mind that would be great, but you don't have to. Mainly I just wanna know if its right? too much, too little? That kind of stuff.
Alrighty, I don't mind. I'm here to help with everything.
You've missed a couple spaces between the commas and periods, worser isn't a word, and you may want to take the parts out about God. I mean, sometimes it may be harder for atheists to understand unless the essay is mainly about God. Epitome is a beautiful word, so good job on that. You have a nice vocabulary, and as long as you finish it up with a closing paragraph, I think it'll be a splendid essay.
Thank you so much for your advice, haha I wondered about "worser," and I'll go look at the grammar stuff. Thank you a bunch
Mmhm! Any time, bro. Any time.
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