Question

If I post the link to the rough draft of my essay for english, will someone give me some advice on it please? We have to write a descriptive essay, but my teacher wasn't really specific on it. She said it could be about anything we want and to aim for 3-5 paragraphs. I wrote mine on a day dealing with anxiety, because thats something I struggle with/know a lot about. But I'm not sure if it is actually a descriptive essay? Like is it too much of a story? Not enough description? Should I change the topic? Focus more on one part of the day rather than a whole one? I just don't know.

Answer 1

Hey, that sounds like a great topic! I'll gladly read what you have!

Answer 2

Thank you! I attached the file to the thing here; I hope it works. Its not finished, but it's what I have so far and I have no idea if it's any of what its supposed to be.

Answer 3

Alrighty, do you want me to show you the grammar mistakes, or do you wanna do that yourself?

Answer 4

Yeah, If you don't mind that would be great, but you don't have to. Mainly I just wanna know if its right? too much, too little? That kind of stuff.

Answer 5

Alrighty, I don't mind. I'm here to help with everything.

Answer 6

You've missed a couple spaces between the commas and periods, worser isn't a word, and you may want to take the parts out about God. I mean, sometimes it may be harder for atheists to understand unless the essay is mainly about God. Epitome is a beautiful word, so good job on that. You have a nice vocabulary, and as long as you finish it up with a closing paragraph, I think it'll be a splendid essay.

Answer 7

Thank you so much for your advice, haha I wondered about "worser," and I'll go look at the grammar stuff. Thank you a bunch

Answer 8

Mmhm! Any time, bro. Any time.