Question

feedback please?? does it show how I feel about him?

Answer 1

hello my love
hello my pride
day one day two day three
are over now
today. day number 21
I want you to know...
you have my soul
you have my hands
you are my love
you are my pride
not one more day
in my life, never again
will be a day
without you in my great world
if you leave i'll end up
a broken mess
lovesick
a broken mess
lovesick
but never again
I could survive a day without you!

Answer 2

This is a good poem your feelings definitely come through strongly. You might want to add some lines to lighten the mood and make him feel more accepting of it.

Answer 3

i agree but maybe you should try putting more of your relationship and what you and him have gone through and how if feels to over come those obstacles

Answer 4

ok thanks a lot for the feedback

Answer 5

This shows that you do like him but you also don't like him well partially anyway

Answer 6

how does it show I don't like him @ColdPlay

Answer 7

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Answer 8

Ah, well what you wrote for him about like you know ook so the bottom of the poem said that you could survive a whole day without him. That means you like him but don't like too.

If you know what I mean.

I still have some dirt left of my girlfriend. We just met and now her sister is my new girlfriend so I've got a lot to say to Taylor.