Question

Take a look at this.

Answer 1

:) i would b glad to

Answer 2

This is an English work, and no one isn't answering at this moment so.

Here it is:

Answer 3

nice dog, btw

Answer 4

ok

Answer 5

what about the outline?

Answer 6

whats ur question

Answer 7

What should I add to it, and have I made a mistake?

Answer 8

I'm currently stuck on what to add, or even if I done it right.

Answer 9

ok its good, is there anything in paragraph 3? its nice overall

Answer 10

Nope, that's the situation. Not sure what to put.

Do you have any ideas?

Answer 11

ok.

Answer 12

what's the question? what are you writing about?

Answer 13

hm.

Answer 14

The thesis that I chose was technology.

How can technology affect the world?

Answer 15

oh so you are sticking with medical technology?

Answer 16

i believe that you should add something about the negative afects of technology (eg. walle world where everyone is fat or environmental affects)

Answer 17

@lordofpens, that's what came in mind.

Do you have any suggestions?

Answer 18

also, do more about surgury and curesfor diseasesm, maybe?

Answer 19

@Its_A_Moot_Point, lol, that seems unprofessional talking about fat :P

Answer 20

if i was writing this, i would be broader on the subject and find 2 other areas besides health care.

Answer 21

Right, surgery it is!

What else, one more idea.

Answer 22

lol, ok sorry. what grade are you in, so i know how professional to be

Answer 23

@Its_A_Moot_Point, Junior.

Answer 24

ok.

Answer 25

@lordofpens, hmm. Broader as in?

Answer 26

maybe talk about the implications of having more technology and living longer, expand on the first paragraph

Answer 27

@its, nice idea. I could do that, but having the introduction like that is fine as well, correct?

Answer 28

better hearing and vison aids

Answer 29

yep it is fine

Answer 30

such as education or businesses which all benefit from technology.

Answer 31

yep good idea @lordofpens

Answer 32

also xrays and faster diagnosis

Answer 33

Also, I only have to stick with one topic on the body, right?

Say for instance, I was talking about what @lordofpens said, education.

Then throughout the whole body is all about education, and students..?

Answer 34

how long is this supposed to be... 3 pages? 10?

Answer 35

because it depends on length

Answer 36

for example, paragraph 1 could be medical technology.. paragraph 2 could be education.

Answer 37

yep^

Answer 38

MY teacher didn't say anything. This is what she gave us:
Still confuses me.

Answer 39

hmmmm

Answer 40

ok i have never writen a paper like that.

Answer 41

unusuall.

Answer 42

I would assume that she want's variation in an essay meaning by subtopics? subtopics of technology.

Answer 43

Okay, @lordofpens, I'll see if I can do that.

Just do the same process as I did on paragraph 2 to paragraph 1? Will that be fine.

Answer 44

The numbering is what I meant not the information.

Answer 45

yeah, that looks about right

Answer 46

I'll start on working on this then I'll tag y'all again.

Is that fine with y'all?

Answer 47

yes :3

Answer 48

yep! its fine with me

Answer 49

good luck!

Answer 50

Great! Hope to see y'all soon.

(Probably later)

@lordofpens thanks, and thank you @Its_A_Moot_Point so far.

Answer 51

anytime.

Answer 52

@lordofpens, & @Its_A_Moot_Point

Here it is, tell me how is it:

Answer 53

ok lemme look

Answer 54

nice job, you included the other 2 ones well

Answer 55

:)

Answer 56

Something is telling me to add more information on the conclusion..

Answer 57

XD p.s. im a freshman and i hope i never have to do an odd format like that, haha. actually we just finished a 10 page essay though and it was tough. you can ALLWAYS add more info

Answer 58

that is what i have learned

Answer 59

@Its_A_Moot_Point, I bet you have too.

Answer 60

haha, darn.

Answer 61

I'm a sophomore and that outline is confusing as hell!

Answer 62

ayyeee now all we need is a senior lol

Answer 63

high shcool party

Answer 64

Exactly! I mean like I don't know this crap.

That's why I just look up in the internet what formal outline really looks like.

Answer 65

the conclusion is worded awkwardly, but i'm assuming you're gonna un-awkward it in the draft?

Answer 66

lol

Answer 67

@lordofpens, yes, this isn't the final so. However, how's the rest besides the conclusion?

Answer 68

so ultimately, this will be 4 paragraphs? or will you add another body paragraph?

Answer 69

On the general outline of what my teacher gave me, can't tell which one is the body but probably the second paragraph..

I might just turn this in, and see what happens.

Answer 70

haha.

Answer 71

Oops, I read that wrong @lordofpens, but is that okay if its 4 paragraphs?

Answer 72

Based on the outline your teacher gave you, i think she expects you to do a 5 paragraph essay. so you will need one more body paragraph..try education?

Answer 73

I put education on the introduction though.

Answer 74

oh hmm

Answer 75

Or unless I can put the education onto the body, and come up with something for introduction? Which I'm not sure what to put.

Answer 76

@lordofpens

Answer 77

the purpose of the intro is to introduce the subtopics. During the body paragraph, here you will extend on the subtopics and explain deeper in depth.

Answer 78

you do not need to come up with "something" in the introduction, just talk about the subtopics you are using briefly.

Answer 79

@vzfreakz