Question

Which sentence is more grammatically correct? (I always give medals!)

In Xavier's diary, it reveals that Tim and him wanted to travel with Vicky more than with me

Xavier's dairy reveals that Tim and he wanted to travel with Vicky more than with me.

Answer 1

dairy?

Answer 2

Diary*

Answer 3

Sorry, my bad

Answer 4

I think it's the second one

Answer 5

In the first sentence, the "it" is ambiguous: it doesn't refer to anything/one

Xavier's dairy reveals that Tim and he wanted to travel with Vicky more than with me.

The second sentence avoids that, but I would still change Tim and he to he and Tim. Also, you should keep the last part parallel. Instead of "than with me", "than he did with me" would be better.

Overall, i would pick the 2nd one as the more grammatically correct because my problems with the second sentence are mostly stylistic issues.

Answer 6

Thank you for your input, it really helped! :)