In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar.Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories. Gardening offers more than a way for kids to have fun. There are many things to gain from working with plants outside. It is unfortunate that many people feel too busy to garden. More people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can creat

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anonymous · Answer

The paragraph itself is pretty good, except for a minor mistake. I think that it could be improved if you stick to one main idea. Right now, it seems like you have several.

anonymous · Answer

Growing flowers is a wonderful childhood memory that not many people have due to lack of interest. Gardening is often a good way for friends to bond while they take care of a garden. Gardening helps children, as well as adults learn to be patient and the result is something beautiful.