Question

My songs
Feedback much appreciated

Answer 1

Growing up making all my decisions
Going down wrong paths fighting my demons
Hiding behind smiles no one could see them
No one could see them, me and my demons

I don’t know how I got here
You spilled the stains
You’re the reason why im stuck on this road
That make me who I am today
I don’t know where else to go
I cant see the light, I’m too blind from all this pain
(How did I get here)
I blame you
(How did I get here)
For all the things you do

I’m lost in the dark that clouds my head
I tried to leave, I dug a whole instead
See what you did to my innocence
Why did you do this to me
You forced me down a road
This isn’t where I want to be

I tried, I tried
I cant do this any longer
I tried to fight
But fear and hate is getting stronger
I tried to hide
Its taking over me
This isn’t what I want
Locking me away in a facility
Giving me pills and therapy

I don’t know how I got here
You spilled the stains
That make me who I am today
I’m stuck on this road
I don’t know where else to go
(How did I get here)
I blame you
(How did I get here)
For all the things you do

Im scarred for life
On the in and outside
You are the monster creeping in the shadows
Are you proud of what you did
Just imagine where ill be tomorrow
Im every bodies little puppet
You pull the strings, so manipulating

But over time I grew stronger
You’re the puppet and I’m the master
I had torn off your mask
All of your secrets are out
You did some dirty tasks
That everybody now knows about
I played my piece and placed it down
I get to choose your road now…

Answer 2

It's dark but good:)

Answer 3

I love it *-*

Answer 4

lol. Thanks ^-^

Answer 5

You were the best parts of me
With you in my life I felt complete
So why did you have to leave me
Right now I’m trying to stay strong
What did I ever do wrong
But now I’m broken once again
Sitting here, you were my closest friend
So where did we go wrong?
Where did we go wrong

our memories play on repeat
Going through the times we had
The memories never left me
Oh god please take them back
it’s just mental pain in my head
I tried saving us, but now I’m leaving instead
You don’t seem to mind, you only seem hurt

I don’t want to be the one whose gonna leave first
I know that I’ve hurt you in some way
I wanted to be the person to take away your pain
But you shut me out, you faced the other way
I’m sitting here, and I have some things to say.

First of all, what happened to our promises?
You promised me not to leave you, and now you’re gone, you vanished
You took away the pain
You promised to tell me everything
You reminded me how much you cared
And now you’re not their

You were my light in the dark
But now you’re fading away
and we’re falling apart
You gave me hope and taught me how to fly
Showed me the way to the light
Showed me the good parts of life
You picked up the pen and showed me how
You were my savior, fought my demons
I don’t even know how you could see them
I wish that I could have gotten to you in time, like you got to me

But with secrets of your own, I can see your pain
I see it in your eyes, I see it everyday
You don’t think that I can
But I know deep down your lost inside, scared & scarred with pain you hide
So know you’re wrong
I want you to know that I care so please hold on
I wish I was the one you needed to stay strong
I wish I told you how much you mean to me
And with my heart you’re the only one who held the key
But you tossed it in the river of long lost tears
This was the day that I most feared

I’m not ready to let you go
But I am ready to let you know
I love you more than words can say
I could go on reminding you every single day
But all the days will never add up how much you mean to me
I guess I just needed better luck
Cause now I’m slowly starting to give up
Yeah, I’m walking away
Not because I love you less
But I know I can’t stay
you already left and I can’t deal with this pain
I’m still here cleaning up this mess
But I know deep down, we are truly done
Congratulations, it is my heart that you have won.

Answer 6

@appleduardo

Answer 7

wow really deep words, i really loved both!! you've made a great job. ;3

Answer 8

its really good! if i were you, i wouldnt make these songs public. someone might steal them!

Answer 9

I agree with @Blacktiger they're too good lol

Answer 10

amazing:D i love it

Answer 11

lol. Thank you for the awesome feedback, makes my day.

Answer 12

:D we all need our day made by someone:)

Answer 13

Angelina Green

Dear Angelina Green
You are beautiful
Why can’t you see that?
It’s okay to cry
It’s okay to pray for light
I know you tried to face your fight
But you couldn’t deal with pain
Many people hurt you in too many ways
But we know you’re at heavens gates
God will protect you
Momma’s little Angel
You will be alright
You won’t deal with this alone now
We are on your side
Little Angel Green
You had beautiful freckles
The way your smile use to beam
If only they told you the truth
You are beautiful and you would’ve found peace
Not the way you chose too
But if only you would’ve waited seeing what’s before you
Your new path would’ve been a ticket to better things
I know we never met, but we are one in the same
Little Angel Green
I will sing your name
Scars will heal, but were meant to bleed
It’s the way you learn new things
I know it’s harsh, but believe in me
Little Miss Angelina Green
Momma’s baby
I hope you are safe
Standing over the ones you love
Standing next to god
Who protects you from up above
I hope you can smile
I hope you can see…
Angelina Green
You are more than what you thought you mean
Rest in Peace.

Answer 14

@appleduardo

Answer 15

oh wow! kind of sad song but no reason not like it, i liked it! ;3 sounds like this should be an acoustic @alesia/bailey

Answer 16

Thanks, and yeah, a girl hung herself from being bullied at a school I moved 2, and I felt like doing something, so I wrote this. It is really sad, I almost cry

Answer 17

sucks that stuff like this still happens on school, but so nice youve wrote a song to her.. :c :c

Answer 18

Yeah, I never met her before.
But when I moved to the school it was bully free and it was like a dream, I was bullied since 5th grade so..
But then my best friend showed me a newspaper about Angelina and after that I always thought about her.
So that's who I was searching for on the internet the whole time I was talking to you.

Answer 19

very good. c;

Answer 20

Thank you ;)

Answer 21

@YouSir

Answer 22

<3. they are beautiful

Answer 23

thanks ^^

Answer 24

\(\Huge\color{pink}{♥}\)

Answer 25

@timothywhitaker

Answer 26

If you want I can sing them for you?

Answer 27

that would be cool..

Answer 28

I love them all @alesia/bailey

Answer 29

thank you.
These are my first songs I've ever made.
I'm surprised people love them.
Just one more step to being a singer <3

Answer 30

You work for your dreams bc u are doing great

Answer 31

keep these songs up and youll become a famous singer someday btw they are all good :)

Answer 32

Thank you :)

Answer 33

@Tazmaniadevil
you write songs, can you give me feedback??

Answer 34

can i steall them from you there really awsome like man like im speachlees there so good

Answer 35

lol thank you.
and I will find out where you live if you steal them.

Answer 36

my bad lol i wouldnt plan on it lol

Answer 37

nut then again i have guns fo protection jk jk lol

Answer 38

lol. :P

Answer 39

Real Asf @Tazmaniadevil LOL!

Answer 40

lol ikr

Answer 41

LOL!

Answer 42

hey nice job i like them all...@alesia/bailey

Answer 43

i like that u kind of have a story behind the song not just an off the wll thin

Answer 44

its from the heart

Answer 45

:)

Answer 46

Everyone has a story behind their deep songs

Answer 47

\[\Huge\color{Blue}{♥} I Love Them\Huge\color{Blue}{♥}\] Great job :)

Answer 48

Thank you ^-^

Answer 49

She is Jst so Awesome!

Answer 50

We were close
Don’t you remember that
Or did you throw away the past
You had hurt me
After you say you love me
You never asked
Why are you crying
Why are you sad
You talk about my friend all the time
Why would you do that
When you knew how much I loved you
I guess ill get by

Well now its over
Im sitting here piecing my heart back to place
You had broke me
Going after my friends that way
I never thought what they said was true
You’re a heart breaker, and he’ll come after you

Did you even love me
Did you even care
Apparently not when you left for her
She said she wasn’t interested
Or so that’s what she told me
But here I am learning from some stranger
You too were caught together
You could’ve told me
Maybe save the pain
Knowing my friends are the ones to blame
Going behind my back like that was too much
To much to take
But now…
Well now its over
Im sitting here piecing my heart back to place
You had broke me
Going after my friends that way
I never thought what they said was true
You’re a heart breaker, and he’ll come after you

And now we’re over you
We are moving along
Wondering who youll take next
Whose heart will you crush
Are going for her friend
It seems to be a chain
Jumping girl to girl
Youre all over the place

Well now its over
Im sitting here piecing my heart back to place
You had broke me
Going after my friends that way
I never thought what they said was true
You’re a heart breaker, and he’ll come after you


Your such a heart breaker
Filled with cold
You took a piece of me
It was something that you stole
But im standing back on my feet
Im gonna wear my heart on my sleeve
But baby, I will not let you get the best of me
you were a waste of my time and such a cheat

Answer 51

@priecetheveil
Its based off of your song, "remake"
lol, I got bored but its not great

Answer 52

these are really great!

Answer 53

Thanks.
again, im actually a newb at making songs x3

Answer 54

seriously!? 0.0

Answer 55

very, I never wrote and finished songs before.
I tried, but I couldn't do it.

Answer 56

xD
I have like one more but I probably wont post it, I feel like its to much, to personal, and disturbing

Answer 57

-Chants *Post it! Post it! [Over 9000 times]*- Teehee

Answer 58

xD
You're a dork.
but idk know, its... I think its to much, I could be wrong.
I just don't think its that great anyways

Answer 59

:( Im not a dork

Answer 60

Im a Dignified little child jk but Im diginified

Answer 61

and mature*

Answer 62

lol my bad xD

Answer 63

Damn Straight

Answer 64

Ive walked through the flames and the burning fire
Dragged through the mud and hung with barbed wire
You say your life was bad, my story is more than minor
using my last breathe is my only desire
Maybe someday my tragedies will fade away
Maybe the afterlife will set my soul free
But I know that life doesn’t work that way
and when I try to find the truth I second guess
I get confused and plead
I slowly start to bleed and end up hearing sirens
After that the light fades but then it slowly brightens
A few days later my wounds start to heal
But behind the scars is a demon that’s revealed
The demons whisper within my mind
And because of that I pick up the sharp knife
Feeling the pain everything fades away
And I find more faith and choose to stay
There’s a lot that happens behind closed doors
Mine are kept secret behind the barriers and boards
And I threw away the silver lock and key
That opens up the door that’s within me
My mouth is sealed shut
But inside I am screaming
Everyone chooses to judge a book by the cover
But when you open it
the truth is discovered
ive been hurt badly
I have been abused
I don’t even know the worst you could possibly do
Mind is shattered
I have been used
Im surprised that I still have some things to lose
Ive cried so much I have no tears left
Ive been through a lot
And im hanging on the thread
Im waiting to fall
To try to make things right and lose it all
I have to make things right
But im stuck on a path
Hopefully this path wont be my very last
When I close my eyes
I see myself in a dark room
Sitting in the corner no light, no day
No door to the outside
Nothing to take away the pain
My mind tries to protect me
Im almost completely numb
I know im not alone, not the only one
I feel like a ghost, I have no reason to stay
But I guess that’s how I was trained to think
Ive been deserted in the dark parts of life since I was 5
Even before that, but I cant remember the past
Surprisingly I’ve survived those parts of life
The present, past, future, it all haunts me
I don’t want to see the real me, I know its ugly
I wont be the person I want to be
But a complete disastrous wannabe
I try to fit in, make up a new me
I obviously don’t know what stay true means
Ive manipulated my own mind
Why shouldn’t i
Everyone else does it
If you can hurt me why cant I do the same
But when I hurt myself you say
im all wrong doing the wrong things
my mind is stubborn
I’ve tried but I wont change my ways
so tell me what am I suppose to do
to get rid of these dark days

Answer 65

you've got some real talent here.. but remember love someone cares about you. put down the blade and pick up your phone call someone and realize you're life ins't the worst. life sucks it really does, but the problem is if you only focus on that it will only get worse. I'm always here to talk to and just remember I care and so do others. xx

Answer 66

<3 thanks.
means alot

Answer 67

@alesia/bailey i love the remake of what you did with my song its WOW is all i can think. thank you

Answer 68

:D
Your're very welcome.

Answer 69

your songs are so amazing! i mean you can tell that they come from something deep. there amazing and you should keep writing i would love to see more!

Answer 70

thank you so much. <3

Answer 71

great

Answer 72

Sounds a bit like TDG or BVB but its alright :P

Answer 73

DANG I love the deep words :) keep it up

Answer 74

No problem @alesia/bailey

Answer 75

when reading that i burst into tears because i could tell just how much emotion is in them how you wrote this from you heart.how much it means to you.you are truely amazing and i wount be surprised if you start writinng for big name artists and even become one yourself.you deserve so much.and i can tell you from expiriance blades bring blood not happiness.although it made me feel like i was in controle and it was great to feel something when the rest of my body was numb it wasnt worth cutting myself.put the blade down hun because you deserve so much.you are truely talented and from your comments i can tell your also super ind.

Answer 76

omg, thank you guys soo much, im speechless.
I wasn't expecting this at all.

Answer 77

@CaptainBatSparrow

Answer 78

I grew up all alone
Where have you been
I needed you here with me
I was 5 already making decisions
If only you knew
But you were never here for me
I know you love me
Don’t get it wrong
But you didn’t remind me
That you cared
that you’ll be there
And tell me to stay strong
I am sorry but…

Don’t expect me to go to you
After everything I have been through
I was five learning how to live
Its been 14 years where have you been

I cried every single night
Saying everything will be alright
Didn’t you hear me
I needed somebody here
Did you not hear my screams

Times get hard, I was lost in the dark
You’ve lost your little girl
Stolen innocence, lost in this world
I have grown on my own
Where have you been

Don’t expect me to go to you
After everything I’ve been through
It’s a little too late to be here for me
I wonder if you would agree
I know a lot more than what you thought
While your life froze
Mine sped up a lot
You’re a little bit behind
And Im ahead
Who needs family
I stick with friends

What’s the meaning of family
Is this what a family means
What have I missed out on
Im wondering so please tell me
I grew up without a mom
Passed back and forth
Set aside, don’t know what for
Living with a stepmom, brother and dad
After years passed, I grew with hate
Was this supposed to be my fate
My stepfamily didn’t showed they cared
I thought they hated me
I don’t think its fair
After all this time
You let me fall
What have you done
Is this your best after all
I’m the child
Have you forgot
This family seems to be so lost
But its too late, cant you see
That friends are all I trust and need

Where were you all this time
What made you think I was alright

Don’t expect me to go to you
And the only reason why you knew
All the things that I have been through
Is because my words spilled right out
I couldn’t hang on any longer
Im getting weaker, not much stronger
But im letting you know now

Don’t expect me to go to you
You never even had a clue, you never knew I needed you
I grew up on my own
You left me here all alone

Is this what family means
God help us please
Is this what a family means
Somebody save us please

Answer 79

Great

Answer 80

thanks <3

Answer 81

wow you are a songwriting machine! :D my favorite is "Little Angel Green" and the story is powerful. terrible but powerful

Answer 82

Thank you so much, you have no idea how much that means to me hearing that, it makes me want to write more :)

Answer 83

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Answer 84

Make sure to tag me if you write anymore. :)

Answer 85

okay <3 ^^

Answer 86

they are sooo amazing tag me if u post more I would love to read them. Do u think u are going to sing any of them?

Answer 87

i would but it would be better if i could also play.
i don't know how im going to sing them but im slowly working on it

Answer 88

that's great you will do amazing!!

Answer 89

I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!!!!!! <3

Answer 90

Thank you ^^ <3

Answer 91

np :)

Answer 92

That last song is about something very hard to write a song about (I grew up all alone). You are very clear almost to direct. Its very apparent your talking about being adopted. I share a story like this, I grew up on the streets of Poland sleeping under a dumpster with no family other than some other kids and we scavenged for food every day and lived tough times and out of the 5 of us only 3 survived. When you have memories like this its hard to remember them almost correctly because of the barrage of feelings. You didn't grow up alone because you had a family, but you felt it like you were alone because you were isolated. If you wanted to make this better you can be less direct which gives the listener alot more to interpret. Its a big reason that 'you' is used in alot of songs. Its mysterious. If you have questions or have any other songs you want me to see then tag me or message it to me. Any questions in general too.