Hi guys!
I wrote something, a poem I guess you could say, and I just wanted to know if it was alright! Thanks!

Question

Hi guys!
 I wrote something, a poem I guess you could say, and I just wanted to know if it was alright! Thanks!

anonymous · Answer

you will be the cloud & I will be the sky
you will be the ocean & I will be the shore
you will be the ocean & I will be the wind
Whatever we are, you & I will always collide.

justnick09 · Answer

this is slightly repeptititve you could rearange it as such if you like it

You will be the cloud and i will be the sky
Whatever we are you and i collide
You will be the ocean and i the wind
whatever we are we will live

justnick09 · Answer

otherwise nice job

anonymous · Answer

Oh.. I like that, thank you for voicing your HONEST opinion!

justnick09 · Answer

ya absolutely, when writing music, or poems try to make it come off easy when you speak it, it should flow easily and be enkoyable. SO when writing say it aloud to yourself a few times

anonymous · Answer

Well thank you! Most people would lie about it, but you were honest! Thanks a ton!

justnick09 · Answer

ya no problem

justnick09 · Answer

@jordanloveangel can u help her spread this for me?

anonymous · Answer

hey @I_Always_Smiling i like both versions of your poem, just keep writing and along the way it gets better and better! just never stop writing :)

justnick09 · Answer

@jordanloveangel

jordanloveangel · Answer

yes i can @justnick09  and wow jordan that was amazing wow good job

jordanloveangel · Answer

@Teddyiswatshecallsme @TheEdwardsFamily @TheRaggedyDoctor  @bohotness @CausticSyndicalist

bohotness · Answer

yes

jordanloveangel · Answer

read the poem

anonymous · Answer

I think its nice Tbh

jordanloveangel · Answer

yup

anonymous · Answer

Im emotional

bohotness · Answer

:)

leonardo0430 · Answer

not bad i give is 16/10 pop tarts good job

anonymous · Answer

great poem great poem 10 out 10

leonardo0430 · Answer

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