Question

Hey guys! Finished my poem for school. :) Thoughts?
Not much of a poem writer lol.
(Poem in comments)
I was wondering if I should make more sections for the other issues I mentioned? I mentioned health, love, laws society and crime - I covered love and health, should I go over the others individually as well? Thanks! :)

Answer 1

"So much to tell you,
Don’t know where to start.
The words I’m expressing,
Come from deep in my heart.

America, you’re broken.
So shattered! So askew!
I’m so disappointed..
Wish it were untrue…

The lives you have wrecked,
No thanks to humanity.
Our Health, love, laws, society, crime…
It truly is insanity.

But are you the one to blame?
Or the people of our nation..
Is this our own undoing?
Or will we fall into damnation..

I think this poem deserves a change.
For it’s not the ground who is to blame
It’s the population who have wrecked it..
And to you is where this poem should aim.

It’s time to step up.
Our people need to take action.
This world is falling fast..
I’m afraid of a chain reaction..

So many problems.. everyone so lost.
One of these issues alone could be our demise.
The health alone is a site to behold..
The obesity in this country is on the rise.

Love and connections..
They have become so damaged and astray
Nobody even knows anymore..
It seems everyone has lost their way

Divorce, abuse, hurt, manipulation, and pain..
Nobody knows what a true connection is even worth.
We are so lost, unable to see the love we all need, especially as children.
Don’t you see? This problem starts, from our birth.

It isn’t to late.. we can still turn around this once great nation
To wrap it all up, I’ll end on this note
If the people are willing.. we can make the change in our country
then and only then, maybe once again, we can “gloat” "

Answer 2

Or if you have suggestions for any word replacements or sum lemme know. :) thanks.