Question

here is a poem anyone wanna read it
if u do just read and post what you think @Crissy15 @Destinycholie @demonchild99 @Demonx341 @One098 @KissMyAxe @kittycat123

Answer 1

its time

im giving up
i cant take no more heart break
i have been broken before but this is worst than ever
now your with some else and i have feelings for you still
i don't know why
but you are all i wanna think about
i cry to the point where i fall asleep
i dont sleep anymore
its just naps
and my body can't take no more
im dying inside it can't be stopped
i try to get help but it dont seem to matter
i am a forgotten child i scream out a name no one answers my screams
my prayers or anything i say it just seems to fade into the air i cry no one hears i wanna die and i think i would be doing everyone a favor
im a waste a air
im a waste to spend money on
i dont listen anymore
i will not fall in love with someone i care about
but its fine because i cry all night and every day
my tears are dry now i can't cry anymore
im fading away every time i speak
when i fall i just seems to lay there for a while and turn into landscape
im tried of living im tried of crying im tired of being hated and im tried of being love by people who don't really love me
it tears me down so much i have to sleep for days to gain my strength and to want to get out of bed in the morning but i cant even seem to smile when he sees me crying and holding my hands on my face he just walks away
nothing passed between us
its not even a thing anymore
its over and so am i
i try to hard and the more i try the worst it gets
i am willing to give it one last try but u keep pushing me away more and more till i die of heart break
and being hated u think is bad try listening to your just a mistake every single day of your life well its hard and i dont wanna do it anymore or hear it anymore

Answer 2

~tears and claps hands~ bravo bravo......amazingly sad and beautiful

Answer 3

thank u

Answer 4

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Answer 5

same with @demonchild99 tears up, whistling(if I could :P), someone needs to get her a trophy!

Answer 6

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Answer 7

mass tagging...beware...

Answer 8

Wow......Thats just, wow

Answer 9

yea i know sorry u can report me i dont care its fine i know mass tagging is againt the CoC i understand i need to follow the rules

Answer 10

im not reporting u..i think its cool u dont care...lol

Answer 11

wow so great it amazing im very glad 2 i readed it wow its amaing tbh im speechless rn

Answer 12

@j57

Answer 13

okay i need yalls honest thoughts about this poem

Answer 14

@Destinycholie @YouSir @crazychickengirl123 @Crissy15 @demonchild99 @Demonx341 @j57 @Clalgee

Answer 15

@CallMeKiki

Answer 16

This literally brought tears to my eyes! It's so dark and beautiful. Really good.

Answer 17

Alright. You asked for our honest opinions and honest opinions is what you will get.

Firstly, some minor things is grammar and punctuation. The both are not major things at the moment due to how little grammar and punctuation errors taken place.

Pros: Your poem was incredibly detailed and had an incredible message. You made the reader feel the pain that the person described in the poem is feeling. While I was reading his poem, I was able to reflect (for a brief second) on the times when I was at my worst. I was able to relate to how the person in the poem was feeling inside. One thing that I also love was your figurative language. It was spot on!

Cons: Honestly, there is nothing wrong with your poem. I feel as if your recent poems that you've tagged me in (so far that I have read) have all been sad and blue. It kind of gives the reader that sad and gloomy feeling as well. It certainly is not a bad thing, but there is just a lot of pain behind it.

Other than that, you did a terrific job.

Answer 18

@tomorrow

Answer 19

can u tell me what you think of these writings

Answer 20

@Michaels_Paradox

Answer 21

Only issue I'm having with you a lot is your grammar, other than that, solid piece.