Question

Poem please read looking for CONSTRUCTIVE criticism

Answer 1

Break a Wish

We find ourselves running in a maze of self reflection.
Trying to redeem ourselves for what we hope is the truth.
But many times it's a phase,
coursing through my veins...
till it finally pops...
then once again I'm still
Because I feel like I've been killed
Only thats a wish.
A wish you thought had gone away
but instead molds you like clay.
Like the guy you love who just blows you away.
With a kiss on the cheek
You can feel its magnetizing reach.
But you're left at the door
unable to escape
so youre sitting there alone feeling like
yesterday.
So we view the memories
but instead we find insanity.
The unreachable collection called.
Breaking Me

Answer 2

@horsegirl27
@MakaylaTracy
@kittycat123

Answer 3

this si very heart warming and dark its amazing i hope u write more like this it has is sending tears to my eyes @ispike

Answer 4

@MakaylaTracy awe thank u

Answer 5

your welcome

Answer 6

@southmini

Answer 7

ok first what is your theme here?

Answer 8

what do u mean by my theme?

Answer 9

@southmini

Answer 10

what is your poem you trying to convey here?

Answer 11

its about a lot of things. It starts out talking about getting over depression. But how easy it is to slip back. you finally get your wish but then its once again broken and your wish changes into something darker. Something that it use to be. @southmini

Answer 12

@demonchild99

Answer 13

it is very beautiful...~two thumbs up~!!!!

Answer 14

@demonchild99 okay thanks

Answer 15

your welcome...did u see my poem?...my bro helped make it better...but...lol