i already turned this poem in I just want to see how others like it

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anonymous · Answer

Alone Wolf In The Night 
Sad wolf cries to moon             
Crystal snow falls to his paws
Alone in the night

anonymous · Answer

alone wolf in night is the title

anonymous · Answer

@Tjbrew  check this out

tjbrew · Answer

I am going to critique it ok? But first, I like the poem and what it says! :) Now how to make it better...Here we go...
First - Title should be A Lone Wolf in the Night (alone as one word means the wolf was all alone in the night but a Lone wolf means he is on his own, but not the only wolf in the area.
Second - Sad wolf cries is great BUT when you add to moon it reads choppy. Better to say Sad wolf cries to the moon.
Third - Crystal snow falls to his paws, would sound better and give a better image if it said, Crystal snow falls around his paws
Forth - Now Alone in the night makes sense and is a great ending meaning the wolf really is all alone...
make sense???

tjbrew · Answer

I love it though, and i love your idea!! Great job!! Medal for you!! :)

anonymous · Answer

thnx my teacher gave me 110%

tjbrew · Answer

Well Deserved! You should feel very proud of yourself!! Keep on writing Poetry!! :)

anonymous · Answer

i have another