Question

one final poem

Answer 1

A feel for darkness
i cry for help
i scream from being hurt
i say i am sorry for the ones i have hurt
i feel sad
i cut
i bleed
i feel no pain anymore
this life i have is nothing with out love
pain
tears
fear
hurt
but i feel like i am a waste of space
waste of time
waste of air
i am not longer wanted
i feel the pain he sends to me
i feel the hurt he feels for me
i cry bc i left it happen
he sees down on me
as i cry my self to sleep at night
i shed one final tear as it runs down my face
the blood running down my arm
into a puddle of fear
as i fall asleep
i die
i am never seen again
u left me this way
i am gone forever
and forever i stay
here lying dead
u run to me
but its too late

Answer 2

@babygirl87 @Destinycholie @Crissy15 @Clalgee @Data_LG2 @DarkMoonZ @demonchild99 @redeemed1312 @chainedecho @One098 @YouSir

Answer 3

@quickstudent @party_girl

Answer 4

that's really good its very sad though

Answer 5

@Sheraz12345

Answer 6

o..m....f...f....g

Answer 7

it's sad, alot Makayla

Answer 8

yay me and mak are might pens..._sorry just bringing a little innocence that i still have to the chat

Answer 9

@j57 @Jesstho.-. @kittenlover731 @King.Void. @Luigi0210

Answer 10

lol

Answer 11

what do you need help with @MakaylaTracy

Answer 12

haha i have to go sorry everyone just leave your replies and i will read them in the morning i hope everyone likes this final poem for a long time

feed back ? @kittenlover731

Answer 13

@ilovewolf @CallMeKiki feed back?

Answer 14

Wow @MakaylaTracy I am lost with words. As always, you poems are beyond exceptional. You take a very big jump towards emotion and soul. That is one of the reasons I enjoy reading your poems. In this particular poem, you send us a message of pain. We are all able to feel your pain, but for a different reason.

I especially loved when you compared a puddle to fear. That is exceptionally creative.

Your writings always seems to touch a lot of people. Continue touching people through your wonderful writing. Great work!

Answer 15

thank u @Clalgee

Answer 16

Your welcome. Thank you for tagging me. @MakaylaTracy :)

Answer 17

when you say "I scream from being hurt/ I say im sorry for the one I have hurt" it doesn't sound right, try " I scream from pain/ I say im sorry for the one I have hurt"

Answer 18

@Alieen feed back ?

Answer 19

@TheSmartOne @TheEdwardsFamily feed back and medal if a good poem i need help trying to make my writing better

Answer 20

@bohotness feed back if u want to