Question

poetry please give honest responses

Answer 1

Spinning around for people to see,
she's so stiff,
because she pretends not to breathe.
There's a fire inside,
But she wastes it away.
Spinning in circles, day after day.
Makeup always perfect,
Hair always neat.
Yet she never gets to speak!

Now tired from boredom,
she tries to break away
But by now that fire,
has lost its glow
and she's thinking...maybe its too late?
...and they see her fight,
trying to run away,
but they shut her in a box
because that's where she should
stay!

So broken once more
By societies hands
But when you dance with
The Devil
expect nothing less than quick sand.
A Broken spiral,
she'll always be chained,
But death was the beginning
and life was the end...

Answer 2

The title is

Doll on A Music Box

Answer 3

@musicmaster

Answer 4

@crissy15 @iGreen. @horsegirl27 @makaylatracy

Answer 5

sorry for late reply
it is great

Answer 6

wow it is great

Answer 7

wow that was great, I love it

Answer 8

@horsegirl27 thanks

@crissy15 thanks

Answer 9

your welcome:)

Answer 10

thats fantastic! i wish i could write poems :( good job though !

Answer 11

@trinitybagwell lol thanks and we all have our talents.

Answer 12

@ispike i think its good but could use alittle more in my opinion

Answer 13

alittle more meaning...?

Answer 14

@serenacox

Answer 15

i think it sad needs a little more explanation @ispike

Answer 16

like how so?

Answer 17

@serenacox

Answer 18

like explanation towards what exactly

Answer 19

it jumped around alot like from boredom to the fire and then death ?

Answer 20

its talking about how its boring to be the same as everyone else and how u have this fire inside u and after that fire gets blown out and no longer exists u just feel dead. Death was the beginning is just meaning the youre dead when ur the same. But i can always write a part 2 for people who dont understand that or its not as obvious for them. @serenacox

Answer 21

ok @ispike