Question

Friend poem plz help
Friends are a treasure you can never buy
They are the reason you smile
With friends who needs enemies
You fight you make-up
A smile is worth a millions
Not a found anywhere else
The warmth I feel just talking to you
and making you smile is all I need to keep me alive
*keep on going plz
@fallenangelorchid @demonchild99 @wingspansson.Silvera01

Answer 1

i would add in some more lines. Your lines are kind of cliche which is fine if you add in some lines that kind of make u think. Poems are supposed to have multiple meanings. If a single word does not have at least three different meanings then find a better word. Add in some depth. When i read a book i want it to be right there and have the story paint me a picture. When i read a poem i want to have to think and create my own picture. Also the flow needs some work adding lines will help with that. Also adding in punctuation will help with the flow.

You have an amazing start and this poem has great potential!!!

If u have any questions or ever need help just let me know!

Answer 2

@Crissy15 it really is good it just needs some fine tuning is all

Answer 3

thanks alot, I will use better words