Question

Be honest
It was a peacefull morning in Boothbay Harbor,even though it seems like in Maine there is always something alive, moving forcing itself to make our days hectic but not today not so far
but then again there is that boat that sea and that fishinghook in my hand and that one fish that taunt's me showing is teeth seems to smiling at me i will get it i swear u that if i dont get it i might as well drop dead tie an anchor to my throat and sink let the fish eat away at my last smile as death sinks in and sadness and pain is no more for me

Answer 1

@ispike

Answer 2

@AaronAndyson

Answer 3

be honest wat do u think

Answer 4

its not done yet but ill put the rest on here when im done ok peoples

Answer 5

I like it so far.
It will be better if its complete.

Answer 6

what is this like a story poem ?

Answer 7

its a story

Answer 8

@ispike do u like it tell me wat should i change

Answer 9

okay well u need a lot more punctuation. its got good voice and everything but the grammar is everywhere.

Answer 10

im gonna try to edit the grammar mistakes for u give me a second

Answer 11

yeah i know i such freaking typ ohs

Answer 12

@AaronAndyson wat du u think im still working on it but wat do u think i should change

Answer 13

@HWBUSTER00 wat do u think

Answer 14

@Conqueror

Answer 15

@King.Void.

Answer 16

@King_Question

Answer 17

@Love_Ranaa

Answer 18

@LunyMoony

Answer 19

I thought it was a story out of a book.
You could just fix all the grammar stuff and it's cool :)

Answer 20

@Love_Ranaa its not done yet im working on it

Answer 21

heres my edited verison for u @serenacox



It was a peaceful morning in Boothbay Harbor. Though it does seem like in Maine there is always something alive. As if it were moving, and forcing itself to make our days hectic, but not today! Not so far at least. Then again, there is the boat, the sea, and that fishing hook in my hand; not to mention that one fish that taunt's me. It begins showing its teeth as if it were smiling at me. I will get it! I swear to you that if I don’t get it, I might as well drop dead, tie an anchor to my throat and sink. Let the fish eat away at my last smile as death sinks in. Then finally sadness and pain is no more for me.

Answer 22

i had to change some wording because of the runnons

Answer 23

oh ok thanks ill change it up so its the way i like it ok @ispike

Answer 24

@serenacox no thats fine just make sure the grammar is correct

Answer 25

ok ill post it when its done ok

Answer 26

It would be nice if it's complete.

Answer 27

its almost done give me 10 min

Answer 28

@vera_ewing

Answer 29

Fix up the grammar and it will be perfect. :)

Answer 30

Done.

Answer 31

almost finished

Answer 32

your grammar can be fixed, but it is fine @serenacox