Question

poem please read and critic

Answer 1

As someone who has made endless mistakes
I know it’s impossible not to.
I remember sitting in the classroom as a child
And always being the “perfect one.”
And if I wasn’t, then I couldn’t look myself in the mirror.
As if I had to prove to the world that I was smart.
So I sat front of the classroom day by day
Waiting to be recognized but all I ever was,
Was the background.
But I wasn’t even that.
Sometimes I was just there.
That broken piece that nobody cares about.
I don’t fit in.
I never have.
I remember that day when you through my jacket on the ground.
You stomped on it
Until the playground sand had covered of every crevice.
Thought you were funny I suppose.
But I never said a word.
I just walked over and looked in your empty eyes
And I put the jacket on.
And I walked away.
Back to the 4 walled structure
That told me who to be another one of its “pictures”
And I believed that for a while.
But it never worked for me.
All they ever did was give me extended time
And reteach and reteach.
But that’s not how I learn.
Isn’t insanity doing the same over and over again
And expecting a different result?
Because I was who I was and I am who I am.
But I was still shoved in a squire day by day
And when I was finally let out
The rest of the world had molded
And I was left alone…
I was left to torture myself
Into an epiphany of who I should be
And I cant.
And as an five year old girl
I had already known that I sat in the dark.
Because how could anyone comprehend the madness
Of a child who speaks another language.
I was taught English…
But it always felt like I was speaking Shakespearean
To the rest of the world.
So no child could ever understand.
Then I lost all my friends
And I realized the truth.
The world just didn’t have an excuse
And my imperfections had to be abused…
So I stuttered as you called me names.
Because it was nothing worse than what I had told myself.
Eventually I was a turtle trying to hide inside shell
That was broken in half.
A crake from you
But let’s not forget the one caused by myself.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

O.M.G. that was awesome!! And it really seems to describe me :P

Answer 4

lol im glad @horsegirl27

Answer 5

@yaraam @paki @thesmartone

Answer 6

Very nice poem @ispike ! :)

Answer 7

wow. thr is nothing i know of to describe that ..it was so amazing

Answer 8

thanks @RainbowBrony555

Answer 9

@demonchild99 thanks

Answer 10

@Zyi6

Answer 11

OMFG. I LOVE THIS POEM! KEEP IT UP DUDE! (medal for you)

Answer 12

@kyi6 oh wow thanks

Answer 13

@Zyi6, my friend.

Answer 14

@ispike OMG HOLY pellet THIS IS JUST flutterING AMAZING EXCUSE MY WORDS

Answer 15

This is amazing lassie, keep up the good work.

Answer 16

This poem is absolutely amazing. I've been there, done that, had all my self-worth derived from school and been lowest on the totem pole for it. This is how I felt, still do, sometimes, and I wish I would have remembered that I had more power in the situation than I thought I did, as the last two lines say.

Thank you for your words.

Answer 17

@MakaylaTracy thanks girl

Answer 18

@fallenangelorchid lol thanks

Answer 19

@geneticrockhopper247 im so glad thank u