Question

My fellow Open Studiers: It is Poem Wednesday!
I know it is too early for a poem (I usually post them during my lunch break) but it's here!!!
You know what to do: Read, comment, critique!!!

Answer 1

Life Compared to a Flower

Life is like a flower
We start off as nothing
Then, suddenly, we peak our way into the world
Then we grow
Suddenly, we're a bud
Then we bloom
We're are something beautiful
But one day, just as the rest of the world starts to enjoy our presence,
We wither, slowly,
And eventually, we return to dust,
To nothing

Answer 2

@koolkat13 @k_lynn @ispike @ilovewolf @horsegirl27 @Librarian @fallenangelorchid @Godlovesme @Crissy15 @mavagirl552000 @minion10010164 @Ravenn Special thanks to @horsegirl27 for giving me the idea of writing this!!!

Answer 3

nice!! XD

Answer 4

AMAZING POEM!!! @heypips I LOVE it c: keep writing and rocking :P

Answer 5

@Heypips

I really like your poem. I think it's actually something we've all compared ourselves to - a flower. Not only have we compared ourselves to flowers, but also have compared society (e.g., they kill the prettiest ones) and made quotes about them too. But your poem just explains it so simply, but at the same time makes us think things like "is life really that simple" or "do flowers have the same feelings/confusion as we do?" and then just makes us wish that life was really that simple. And I think I just wrote a paragraph that might not make much sense. xD Sorry if it doesn't. :3

Anyways, I think your poem is amazing, although I do wish that there would be additional parts like how flowers struggle too, like they get stepped on, we get back-stabbed, hurt, etc... Although I do like your beginning saying that we were nothing, I think it would relate more to humans if you say something like "We start off small/Needing support from almost all" (all being soil, air, water, and in humans food, water, milk) And maybe you can also put that both flowers and humans need love. :3

But it was a great poem, I really liked it and hope you keep writing! :D

Answer 6

Yes, Wednesday. Allow me to publish something else to boost this group!
Bring me this beat to the peak,
cause it hits hard the beat of my heart beat
So increase the heat in my sleeve
as long as I don't take the form a beast
to risk its life in pride to smile.
I get names to rename my identities;
The only solution to reattach my real name
is using trigonometric identities
Hence don't think your my enemy, frenemy.
Take your baby, I'll take mine.
Let's party hard
back in my army
with some cocky branches of batches of clashes of clusters
full of undesirable disasters of karate masters,
whom become stutterers ,
whenever they see my infra-red oblique-bent blended cameras.

Answer 7

@Heypips the poem is great! the only thing is, you say "We're are something beautiful" which should be either "We are something beautiful" or "We're something beautiful". other than that, nice!

Answer 8

@Heypips I LOVE the poem! Keep doing what you're doing :)

Answer 9

nice @Heypips two thumbs up from me :):)

Answer 10

@samismores Thanks!
@Godlovesme Thanks and I will keep writing
@hugsnotughs yeah... it made sense and I wrote it yesterday but I forgot to save it so I had to type it in as best I could from memory.... I assure you it was way better yesterday... and thanks for you comment!!!
@Hoslos you said Yes, Wednesday. Allow me to publish something else to boost this group! But it is not a group. I post poems every Wednesday and Friday, that's why I call it Poem Wednesday... but thanks for taking your time in reading my poem and writing one of your own!!!
@TwilightRain1 Thanks for the comment, and like I told @hugsnotughs , I wrote it yesterday but I forgot to save it, so I was typing it in a hurry this morning.
@mavagirl552000 thank you Girlie!!!
@Ravenn thank you!!!