Question

Feedback on my poem

Hey guys if you could take a look at my poem I wrote and give me some feeback...
Specifically what you like or dislike about it...

Answer 1

Death is like the rain
It comes and drenches what is alive
He consistently pelts them with droplets so brutal that eventually everything stops
The rain is also beautiful
In a more haunting definition of the word
After the rain comes even more life
With rain comes a growing of the plants of the earth which when combined with sunlight brings forth something awe inspiring
Death is also like a tornado which destroys everything in its path
With no regard for what or who it is destroying
It comes without warning much as an unwelcome guest comes to a party
It ruins what is good and noble
It eradicates any forms of life standing in its way
However, death is also like the rain

Answer 2

Pretty cool. Maybe change the similie 'death is also like a tornado' to death is a tornado. The 'also' is confusing and unnecessary, like the first one.

Cool poem, though!

Answer 3

Okay I will definitely keep that in mind
Thanks!

Answer 4

@LeilaJudeh @jabez177 @Awolflover1 @PRAETORIAN.10 @hysusonic @Bahurverse_Luver @dan815

Answer 5

I LOVE IITTT!! But I do agree with Surfer about the tornado part. Other than that, perfect ^_^

Answer 6

Okay cool thanks

Answer 7

soo Good! @isry98 Keep up!

Answer 8

Its awesome keep making moring

Answer 9

dude you're so deep i can't even see you anymore

Answer 10

LOVE IT

Answer 11

i may have wet my pants it that awesome

if you know what i mean....

Answer 12

of course broski of course XDDD
A stream of water came from some sprinklers from the outside through a window and on toy your pants obviously XDDD

Answer 13

to*

Answer 14

happens all the time, I'm not surprised this isn't a world-wide issue. it sure puts a dampener on my nights xD
see what i did there?

Answer 15

Yes I did XDDD the puns are real

Answer 16

i wish my girlfriend was real

Answer 17

but every time i look down its my hand not her head

Answer 18

hahaha eating a cookie right???

Answer 19

naturally

Answer 20

Why are you blowing up my notifications... -_- xD

Answer 21

I apologize we are just trying to have a civilized conversation between two broskis gosh

Answer 22

about wet pants hahahaha

I was being nosy ;p

Answer 23

Yes and the likelihood they could happen at any moment

Answer 24

@Tootles143

Answer 25

I LUFF IT!!! <3 SO CREATIVE AND BEAUTIFUL!!

Answer 26

What do you specifically like or dislike about it though???

Answer 27

get someeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Answer 28

Nothing really. I just luff the fact that you had good and bad thingz about the effects of rain. Like how there is something positive and then something negative.

Answer 29

^ that, and its a little hard to read in parts. try adding some punctuation (comas, etc.) other than that, AWESOME :D. and i particularly like the "rain" theme. i'm a rain luver ;)

Answer 30

Okay I will keep that in mind
Thanks!

Answer 31

I love the poem, and I love the idea, but I can't help but think it would sound amazing as a monologue. I don't know...I think I might have just been studying Hamlet too much and Shakespeare is starting to get to me.

Answer 32

I love it.. How it's bad, but yet good. It's deep o.o Soooo Good!

Answer 33

You Did a Amazing Job !!


Sorry if im late X3

Answer 34

"An amazing" @Awolflover.

Splendid job I must say mate, bravo young lad, bravo !

And @Praetorian.10 I know what you meant buddy, try and keep it clean. xD :P

Answer 35

my bedroom is full of dirty happenings though....

Answer 36

Wow... I'll never bring my wife to your house for a check up... xDDDD :P :P :P