Hey, everyone! I'm writing an essay on Night, by Elie Wiesel. Can you guys help with my introductory paragraph? I wrote it but it needs editing.

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confusionist · Answer

In Night by Elie Wiesel, Wiesel introduces the idea of forgetfulness as a precursor for constant disaster. It destroys his future because he doesn't remember his mistakes and the signs he's received in the past. Concurrently, the same effect happens outside Eliezer's story. The other people throughout Germany and other countries forget about the past and the hate crimes committed against them and they don't see the horrors that await them.

anonymous · Answer

Just the theme of the story first

anonymous · Answer

the theme is to teach the person in the story a lesson

anonymous · Answer

hope i helped :)

anonymous · Answer

Hmm... I believe you could expand in a few places. For example, in the beginning of your paragraph you said "In Night by Elie Wiesel, Wiesel..." You seem a bit repetitive here and that may be an issue. A revision of "In his publication of 'Night', Wiesel..." would fix the problem there. Also, when you mentioned "the other people throughout Germany and other countries," who are these people? Citizens? Nazis? Cats in teacups? Another thing I noticed that stood out to me was when you wrote "they don't see the horrors...." What if they simply cannot? A simple change in that spot could open another door to expand on. 
Other than that, great thesis.