Question

criticism?

Answer 1

sometimes i get scared
that somehow
some day
you might find all the things I wrote about you

but sometimes
i kinda want you to find them
all the words i wrote about you

maybe then
you might understand
even a small piece
of how I felt
after everything

maybe my words
will show you
how much I truly love you

maybe my words
will make you want me again

Answer 2

Very good wording. Everything flows. If I were writing this, I would take out kinda in kinda want you to find them. But of course, this is very good as is.

Answer 3

thanks! :D

Answer 4

This just gave me a novel idea. But it's an interesting thought and very well expressed. Is this perhaps a follow-up to what you write earlier???

Answer 5

not intentionally, i just kind of write, but perhaps subconsciously?

Answer 6

It sounds very lovely, but I feel like you can work on your diction! As well as your line structure (:
Like instead of saying "sometimes i get scared" you can change it up a bit and say "At times I fear", it'll just makes it sound more poetic
(And try to stay away from words like "kinda")
Hope I helped!

Answer 7

You seem to send mixed signals in your writing.. I'm a bit confused as to what your intentions are.

Answer 8

@_Squish the mixed signals are the whole point.