Question

I wrote an essay over the "Irony of War" for the novel "All Quiet on the Western Front". I was wondering if some can check it for grammar mistakes, punctuation, etc...

*Make the correction in highlighter and tell me if there's anything wrong with it .*

*Note: The information like this: (Pupp, Kolby). are my citations and information came from there but if something doesn't sound right with the source information, please make the highliation and explain what's wrong with it or any changes to it.

Answer 1

Things I saw that stood out

Original: because as soon as you read it you sense that irony is being used (Pupp, Kolby).

Feedback: because as soon as you read it, you sense that irony is being used (Pupp, Kolby).

Original: Irony is an important part in the story, because it shows how Paul is battling himself, others and everything around him during the war (Pupp, Kolby).

Feedback: Irony is an important part in the story. It shows how Paul is battling himself, others, and everything around him during the war (Pupp, Kolby).

Original: One chapter of the book Paul is on leave and gets to go home for a while (Pupp, Kolby).

Feedback: Hard to try and see what your saying might want to go back and revise.

Original:During Paul’s leave home while he is walking around town he runs into a Major in the army, at this point Remarque uses irony towards people (Pupp, Kolby).

Feedback: During Paul’s leave home he is walking around town when he runs into a Major in the army, at this point Remarque uses irony towards people (Pupp, Kolby).

Original: This is a perfect example of irony, because Paul only bumped into him and didn’t know who it was at first, while the Major is screaming at him in the middle of the town (Pupp, Kolby).

Feedback: This is a perfect example of irony because Paul only bumped into him and didn’t know who he was at first. While the Major is screaming at him in the middle of the town (Pupp, Kolby).

Original: Paul has discipline and he knows it, because as much as he would like to argue with the Major Paul holds himself back and does what he is told to do (Pupp, Kolby).

Feedback: Paul has discipline and he knows it. As much as he would like to argue with the Major Paul, he holds himself back and does what he is told to do (Pupp, Kolby).

Original: On the day of Paul’s death is considered ironic, because it was all quiet on the western front (“All Quiet On The Western Front”).

Feedback: The day of Paul’s death is considered ironic. It was considered ironic because it's all quiet on the western front (“All Quiet On The Western Front”).

Original: After all his trials, pain and misery he had become a soldier; he had become a man, only to die in the quiet of the western front (Aslan).

Feedback: After all his trials, pain, and misery. He had become a soldier; he had become a man, only to die in the quiet of the western front (Aslan).

Original:Situational irony occurs when Himmelstoss gets food for Tjaden on page 138, and when Paul uses the coffin as protection for the war on page 67 (Hannah).

Feedback: Situational irony occurs when Himmelstoss gets food for Tjaden on page 138. When Paul uses the coffin as protection for the war on page 67 (Hannah).

Answer 2

@DatChinookGuy question about this one: Irony is an important part in the story. It shows how Paul is battling himself, others, and everything around him during the war (Pupp, Kolby).

Answer 3

do you think I can put a semicolon between story and It.