Question

criticism please? :)

Answer 1

i'm sorry that we never got our happily ever after
maybe we are just one of those stories that always ends in tragedy
perhaps i'm just a soiled princess
and you a rotten knight
your armor was never shining
my dress was always wrinkled
we made for a messy fairytale
but your eyes were so clear
i never took notice of
the flaking paint on the props
or the cord for the curtain
I spent so long stuck
on our scripted happily ever after
i never even noticed
you scribbling the words
to our last scene
but then it was here
and from that day on
the only fairytales in my life
were the ones i read about in books

Answer 2

I think this is great!

Answer 3

It's really good!

Answer 4

Pretty good. I know this is just my own reaction to poems, but usually I try really hard to rhyme the words. However, you do not have to rhyme.

Answer 5

I find that rhyming poems with a serious topic feels juvenile and defeats the purpose. but just my opinion! :)

Answer 6

That's a good point. I wouldn't mind it either way but that's a good way of putting it! But I also love how you compared it to being totally scripted and fake. I thought that was clever.

Answer 7

@mattagarrett thanks. thisis probably my favorite thing i have written, and I write a lot. lol

Answer 8

Well keep it up then! Tag me in anything you write if you choose to put it on here, I'd love to see!

Answer 9

thanks i will!

Answer 10

Yeah. I still like your poem otherwise. :P