Question

Poem!!

Answer 1

YAY! :)

Answer 2

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Answer 3

Wow now another one i'm gonna have to work overtime lol

Answer 4

Lol. Wanna get paid? Cause I don't have to pay you, lol.

Answer 5

Cool! (I couldn't read it because my computer wanted me to do a set up wizard thing but that's still cool that you make poems) :3

Answer 6

@pinkcandyrosez882
I can put it here if you want.

Answer 7

I was joking lol I don't get paid anyway there is no such thing as"overtime" hehe
And I'll do it sugarplum

Answer 8

If you want, sure thank you!

Answer 9

Those two
Their always having fun
while I'm a total bum.

Nobody talks to me, or walks with me
I'm totaly alone, no one cares or seems to care
Untouchable and unbreakable, I would see how makeable.

Him & Her but how I wish it was Him &Me
Untouchable and Unshakeable, sometimes I just stare into space
As I'm writing, I start drawing until I see his face.

His face is what made me here in the first place
But as I told, I'm untouchable and unbreakable,
he talks to me, little old me as I get jittered up and
doesn't speak.

Creeping a small blush on my cheeks, seeing his white pearl teeth
I can't talk and I couldn't breath but seeing him face to face is unreal.

Never did I think we end up togther just because of our unbreakable selfes.

Answer 10

There ya go!

Answer 11

Cool poem :D

Answer 12

The newer edited one will be posted soon (because I am the head editor for her ^_~)

Answer 13

It just came to my head. :P

Answer 14

Wow :)

Answer 15

love the imagery!

Answer 16

Thanks @jessmitz

Answer 17

I like the content, but it does need a couple of edits :)

Answer 18

I'm working on it >.< lol

Answer 19

That's what @~*Ashtyn*~ is for she's my editor.

Answer 20

A editor whose brain is dead but don't worry it's charging ;) haha

Answer 21

Lol :)

Answer 22

Great poem

Answer 23

Thanks @Sam_Aka_Sara

Answer 24

@sugarplum15
Here is the edit :)

Answer 25

I LOVE YOU, AND YOU, AND YOU!! Your the best editor ever @~*Ashtyn*~ in the 21st century!!

Answer 26

OK. PEEPS LISTEN! @~*Ashtyn*~ IS MY EDITOR AND @pinkcandyrosez882 IS CO-EDITOR! AND THEY HAVE EARNED IT BY THEIR TALENTS AND ABILITY TO RYHME ALSO BUT THAT'S NOT THE ONLY REASON, THEY ARE SO TALENTED!

Answer 27

Thank you :3

Answer 28

By the way, @~*Ashtyn*~ Is still Head Editor.

Answer 29

Yay! :) thx <3333333333333333

Answer 30

I think that this poem was very descriptive and well-done; I certainly could relate to it. (Unrequited love...that's a pain in the neck. Perhaps pain in the heart is more accurate, though.)

*Holding back Jinxy, my inner grammar freak...gives up and gently releases her. Don't worry, she's pretty harmless.*
There were some grammar errors that I spotted, and since I couldn't access the link to the edit (I don't know why; sorry), here they are:
"They're always having fun", not "Their always having fun".
"Totally alone", not "Totaly Alone".
I think "Him & Her" and "Him & Me" should be changed to "Him & her" and "him and me", but if you meant to capitalize all of them so as to show the importance of it, then I understand. (Particularly if you mean for the two other characters to be anonymous.)
"Don't speak", not "doesn't speak".
I think that "A small blush creeping up on my cheeks" is better wording for "Creeping a small blush on my cheeks".
"Can't breathe", not "couldn't breath".
"Selves", not "selfes".

I hope that helps! Again, I found this poem to be very interesting, I apologize for letting out Jinxy *currently putting her back in again*, and I encourage you to keep on writing! Good job, @sugarplum15, @~*Ashtyn*~ , and @pinkcandyrosez882! (^_^)

Answer 31

Thanks for the input I noticed the same mistake AFTER I posted it lol

Answer 32

Thanks I didn't really help much tho sorry

Answer 33

Yes you did ;)