Question

Thoughts? :) I find that poems are most often hopeless or portray a deep hurt from the writer. I wanted to try something different, something uplifting, perhaps mysterious ;P

Glass Pane

As we walked
I was lonely no longer
I was a guide, a pathfinder, an original
as we walked
the sun seemed warmer

Life pulled from
young breath giving air
and I believe
life is better looked at
from a single window
after all

Answer 1

I agree, that is definitely mysterious. But, it is quite beautiful.

Answer 2

It's beautiful. :)

Answer 3

awesome :)

Answer 4

It's nice to see a poem that isn't depressing! It's beautiful (:

Answer 5

Well it is awesome but its kinda deep thoughts :)

Answer 6

i would have liked to have seen some more diversity between the lines and a little bit more depth but other than that i really liked it

Answer 7

I like it

Answer 8

I think its awesome :3 And i do agree with you

Answer 9

Thank you, @ispike ! I am always looking to improve. How would you add diversity in the case of this poem? example? :)
and thanks everyone else for your kind words^-^

Answer 10

Madycayer, ikr.
Rcv, perfect! that was my intention :))

Answer 11

the one thing i would for sure change is the two lines that r right next to each other and start exactly the same