Question

someone help me rephrase this paragraph

Answer 1

i wrote it as a solution

Answer 2

What exactly are you trying to do?

Answer 3

this is for my argumentative essay

Answer 4

and we are not allowed to write a paragraph discussing a solution for technology causing loneliness

Answer 5

Do you need reasons why technology use should be limited?

Answer 6

so this paragraph i wrote it as a solution for technology and how can we avoid loneliness so i wanna rephrase this paragraph and write it as a main idea that technology causes negative effect because of excess use

Answer 7

i don't want it as an advice

Answer 8

cause i wrote one of the advice that parents should monitor...

Answer 9

but i want someone to extend this paragraph and write about the same main idea but not as an advice

Answer 10

I suggest that you take out that part and add examples of things that could go wrong if left unsupervised, like inappropriate sites. And medical issues that may come about

Answer 11

my essay is about how technology makes people lonelier

Answer 12

wanna see my essay i took off the paragraph regarding the advice

Answer 13

?

Answer 14

yes

Answer 15

My version of Word is stupid and won't load it. So could you tell me the main point of each paragraph?

Answer 16

i have to add another paragraph but i don't know i need another main point to discuss about

Answer 17

You could talk about it can lead to depression and that it can make your success in school plummet

Answer 18

my essay is about loneliness not depression but i can replace the work depression with loneliness

Answer 19

can u help me writing this paragraph

Answer 20

I'm not sure what you want me to do

Answer 21

i want another main idea for my essay

Answer 22

my essay is about how does tech cause loneliness

Answer 23

Talk about how the lonliness can lead to depression, its a valid point and is a quite comon occurence

Answer 24

ok can u help me

Answer 25

Yep

Answer 26

how can i begin

Answer 27

Maybe: Another thing that technology can lead to if left unchecked is intense loneliness, or depression.

Answer 28

So that could be your first sentence maybe

Answer 29

ok thanks

Answer 30

No problem