Question

I have a random Haiku for you that I wrote in like 7th or 8th grade.
As the sun shines bright
The last leaf falls to the ground
Winter is coming

Comments or thoughts?

Answer 1

sik

Answer 2

? @supahotfire

Answer 3

Gorgeous, short and sweet :)

Answer 4

Thank you! <3 @Babynini

Answer 5

I think this is a very good haiku.
With just those short simple words, it tells a whole story of how it's the end of fall, nearly winter.
Good job!

Answer 6

And I agree with Babynini, it's short and sweet :)

Answer 7

Thank you!! @horsegirl27

Answer 8

You're welcome!!
Do you still write haiku's or other poems? You're quite talented. Haiku's can be tricky because they need to be good, make sense, and then have the certain amount of syllables.

Answer 9

I haven't in a long time. I just never have time anymore. I have a cinquain that I wrote that sane year though. But it's not as good.

Answer 10

same**

Answer 11

Oooh, post it here please, I'd like to see it!! You should try to write more when you have time! But I understand what it's like; I used to write poems all the time, but suddenly I haven't posted one in months because I'm so busy! XD

Answer 12

Are you sure? It's really bad and it's about turtles... haha

Answer 13

I love turtles haha
And I'm sure it's fine :)

Answer 14

I'll post it in the comments. Is that good? Or should I close this and post it as a "question?"

Answer 15

Posting it here in the comments will be fine.

Answer 16

Turtles
slow, curious
crawling, rolling, hiding
quiet, peaceful, meditative
Turtles

Answer 17

It's so dumb... I know.

Answer 18

Yeah..

Answer 19

Could be better.

Answer 20

I was like 13 when I wrote it. haha

Answer 21

Do you have any constructive criticism for me?

Answer 22

I'm open for things that might help.

Answer 23

OKay, sorry I was gone. So, it's not that bad actually. I think it just needs to be reworded slightly, let me think about that.

Answer 24

And btw,age doesn't matter for writing
I'm 13 XD
started writing poems when I was 8

Answer 25

haha @horsegirl27 yeah but some people are better than others and have had more practice. This was my first time ever writing anything.

Answer 26

That's pretty good for your first time lol

Answer 27

Thanks @horsegirl27

Answer 28

you're welcome :)
I think with some more practice, you can write some really good stuff!

Answer 29

Thank you again. You're too kind. @horsegirl27