Question

Can someone please help me? I will metal and fan

Answer 1

I need help with my thesis statement.. I have to use this website--

http://www.tommarch.com/electraguide/thesis.php

Answer 2

The questions it asks on the website---
What's the topic you want to write about?-
high school graduates should take a year off before entering college

What's your main opinion on this topic?
I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college, a graduate can travel, relax after doing 12 years of school, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition

What's the strongest argument supporting your opinion?
instead of going right into school graduates should do more research on colleges and learn more about a particular field of study they would like to major in

What's a second good argument that supports your opinion?
explore other interests they might have

What's the main argument against your opinion?
parents feeling anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college and that some graduates might not ever go to college after taking a year off

What's a possible title for your Essay?
- I dont have one yet

Id like to use the information above.. But it comes out weird and I need help fixing the answers to make the thesis work so that the outline it creates on the website will work as well.

Answer 3

I tried, and I got this.

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a Persuasive Thesis Statement on High school graduates should take a break before entering college:


Even though Parents feeling anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college and that some graduates might not ever go to college after taking a year off , I believe high school graduates should take a break to earn money and prepare for college. because They should explore other interests they might have

Answer 4

I already have a thesis statement from the information listed above. But it doesnt flow right (just like your response). Im asking for help to make it flow and to change around my answers.

Answer 5

Thesis-- Even though parents feeling anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college and that some graduates might not ever go to college after taking a year off, I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college, a graduate can travel, relax after doing 12 years of school, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition because explore other interests they might have and instead of going right into school graduates should do more research on colleges and learn more about a particular field of study they would like to major in.

I changed it a bit--- Even though parents feel anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college after high school, I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college because school graduates should do more research on universities/colleges and learn more about a particular field of study they would like to major in and a graduate can travel and relax after doing 12 years of school, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition.

They dont flow right.. I need assistance changing it around.. The website creates a thesis statement and an outline. But the thesis needs to flow right to make the outline correct to follow.

Answer 6

Hows this---

Even though parents feel anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college after high school, I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college because graduates should do more research on colleges and learn more about their intended major and they could go travel and relax after doing 12 years of school, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition.

Answer 7

Even though parents feel anxious that their child is not going straight into college after high school, I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college because graduates should do more research on colleges, learn more about their intended major, travel, relax, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition.

it would make more sense worded like this ^^
i'm no expert, but avoid using so many "and"s! it makes it into a giant run-on sentence. use your commas

Answer 8

THANK YOU!!

Answer 9

you are very welcome x

Answer 10

nice thesis statement @090909090909

Answer 11

Ive been working on this for over 4 hours now -.-

I will tag you if I need any more help!!! Any ideas on a title?

Answer 12

Why Students Should be Take a Gap Year?