Question

HELP!!! MEDAL AWARDED TO ANYONE THAT HELPS!
Use temporal transitions to revise the following paragraph. You may need to create additional details or information. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Darius went to the store. He wanted food. He ran into his teacher there. They talked about his latest project. He decided to base his project on gourmet cooking.

Answer 1

@usukidoll can you please help me ill follow you as well

Answer 2

Normally I don't help with questions in English...probably because I need to focus on Mathematics. Hmmmmmmm.... we have to use all past tense though, so your setting better be in the past.

Answer 3

so what would be a good setting? like a time?

Answer 4

okay thanks & um...like an era or like time as in 2:00..?

Answer 5

well... we still need to respect history as back then people bartered and there weren't any stores. And since the story has to be in past tense, we can't use this week or next week.

Answer 6

barter <- to trade goods with one another

Answer 7

Okay gotcha

Answer 8

the last sentence mentioned "gourmet cooking" so we can't have him go to the dollar store.

Answer 9

Lol so it could be Darius had gone to tho the store lats week.

Answer 10

yes exactly like last week or yesterday

Answer 11

being specific about the time and day works too... as long as it's not the future xD

Answer 12

Okay thanks thats a big help

Answer 13

what about method of transportation?
And how old is Darius anyway?

Darius could be an adult... maybe he drives or catch the bus? His class could be for community college

Or.. Darius could be a teenager in high school and either he caught the bus or his parents drove him.

Answer 14

There is a food science and nutrition class in high school... maybe that's a good subject for where the assignment came from

Answer 15

i see okay yeah

Answer 16

Or he could be in a culinary program at a community college... see how listing all the possibilities we can have different scenarios

Answer 17

yeah thanks i have to write another one as well so ill try that

Answer 18

Temporal transition as in using different grammar devices without changing the original meaning of the paragraph?

Answer 19

Gotcha thanks @Robert136

Answer 20

someone out there got the temporal transition meaning
http://openstudy.com/study#/updates/526f23b4e4b017700a8d231e

Answer 21

yeah

Answer 22

ok.. maybe the research topic is a big part of his grade and he's not doing so well right now?!
or it could be for extra credit
endless possibilities.

Answer 23

mhmmm good idea

Answer 24

Darias had transported his presence to the store.

Answer 25

He had the desire to consume food

Answer 26

He had unexpectedly encountered his teacher there.

Answer 27

I'm using techniques from one of my literary analysis classes from a long time ago. This short 6 word only
For Sale
Baby Shoes
Never Worn

Answer 28

They had a conversation/discourse about their most recent project.

Answer 29

is an example ... of having endless possibilities.

Answer 30

true

Answer 31

He decided upon completing his project via activity called gourmet cooking.

Answer 32

transported? how though? ah lets say by bus xD!
keep in mind with the past tense... technology didn't have teleporters xD!

Answer 33

There you have it all

Answer 34

so Darius eats a lot and just from some out of the blue moment bumps into his teacher?! O_O! XDDDDDDD!

Answer 35

Since the means of transportation is not explicitly known, you need to transition the sentence without expressing the means by which he had arrived at the store.

Answer 36

Yess i do! i appreciate it thanks guys @UsukiDoll @Robert136

Answer 37

got it

Answer 38

Therefore, disregard the means, and hence say "arrived to the store" "arrived at the store" "he had moved from point A to point B" kind of way

Answer 39

what about this?
"You may need to create additional details or information. Use proper spelling and grammar.
"

Answer 40

yeah i see what you mean thanks.

Answer 41

we can create additional details or information. Nothing is stopping us

Answer 42

You can't diverge from what is already stated in the original paragraph, nor make up anything not already said or known.

Answer 43

diverge as in go off from what's already said

Answer 44

as in detracting from what is conveyed by the paragraph

Answer 45

hence nullifying the paragraph in question

Answer 46

very interesting

Answer 47

General English doesn't really intersect with Science English

Answer 48

For example, "get the momentum" doesn't mean so when using the phrase

Answer 49

English speakers are ignorant enough to use the phrase without knowing the physics behind it:):)

Answer 50

but anyway if you can't diverge away from the information, what's the point in this then?
"You may need to create additional details or information. Use proper spelling and grammar.
"

It was listed after the instructions.

Answer 51

I think that temporal transition is valid only when one uses transition verbs/words to make the paragraph flow better. That doesn't allow you to make up things that would blemish the original points being conveyed.

Answer 52

We know that he went to the store, he met his teacher, and that he wanted food, as well as that he had decided to base his project on gourmet cooking

Answer 53

Oh I see like Darius went to the store because he wanted food.

Answer 54

but saying the facts without "connection" doesn't sound rhetorical either.

Answer 55

Since he wanted food, he had gone to the store. Surprisingly he met his teacher out of the blue. After talking to the teacher about his upcoming assignment he had decided to base it on gourmet cooking.

Answer 56

See that flows better

Answer 57

That still conserves the original points

Answer 58

Since Darius wanted food, he had gone to the store. Surprisingly, he met his teacher out of the blue. After talking to the teach about his upcoming assignment, he had decided to base it on gourmet cooking

Missing a few commas.

Answer 59

I see so we have to focus on what we already have and use connections to make the sentences flow better.

Answer 60

Good point:)

Answer 61

At least my editing never died xD. Yeah I used to be a big fan of English courses. Not sure what happened...maybe after I declared Math as my major everything in English fell apart...funny though because I still score A's in upper division English. xD.

Answer 62

Yeah everyone is refined every year

Answer 63

I am going into university from this September majoring in Physics. In order to do so, I would still require extensive training in numeracy skills as well as algebraic, even so far as calculus.

Answer 64

oops

Since Darius wanted food, he had gone to the store. Surprisingly, he met his teacher out of the blue. After talking to the teach[er] about his upcoming assignment, he had decided to base it on gourmet cooking

Answer 65

Missing any commas? I really suck at commas:)

Answer 66

hehe I already took Calculus 1-4 . The last one is nasty .. and for Calculus II YOU WILL BE MEMORIZING A LOT OF FORMULAS! >:D

Answer 67

I made a typo I typed teach instead of teach[er]

Answer 68

:)

Answer 69

Already inferred

Answer 70

Mathematical Physics is killer. You will be computing a lot and it's lengthy.

Answer 71

I can see that already happening..... thanks to our brains

Answer 72

they say thousands of numbers are unconsciously involved in executing any move

Answer 73

I mean in our biological brain

Answer 74

my homework was long... sure I had 2 weeks but wow still I could barely get to every problem. On top of that I was using LaTeX which types out Math formulas.

Answer 75

I guess we are all paying the price of using calculators

Answer 76

In china calculators are banned

Answer 77

P.S. I haven't been using Calculators for years and I got used to it already

Answer 78

incredbile

Answer 79

where are you based?

Answer 80

Hey let's go to the questio by juliadiogenes