Question

Can I please get help with this essay?

Answer 1

What you've got is good, how long does it have to be?

Answer 2

5 paragraphs 700 words @HNeli

Answer 3

That's really good!

Answer 4

Ok then. I trust your tutor to know what their talking about, but in my opinion saying "feeling close to nature is fun" isn't something very realistic. People don't really say that.
I guess I am understanding now, maybe instead of "Even though..., a resort can also..." you could replace "Even though" with However or Although. Sou it sounds maybe more in a matter a fact tone of that "Although camping can be beautiful, a resort can allow for astonishing sites with perks of...."
Sorry if I caused you to be thrown off before, didn't intend on that. Also, I think it makes perfect sense...and I'm the reader.

Answer 5

Okay.. Sorry im working on this, talking to you, and doing an excel assignment..

Answer 6

It's totally fine I'm not in a rush for anything.

Answer 7

Alright.. So what should I change this to-- "Camping in the woods or wilderness surrounded by trees and feeling close to nature." What you said is true

Answer 8

So with that sentence you could do two things, add to it or change it completely. If you want to add to it you could say " Camping in the woods or wilderness surrounded by trees and feeling close to nature can give you a look to our ancestor's lives." The problem with doing this is that you risk the chance of people miss understanding you like camping more. Now changing it, "Camping in the woods or wilderness surrounded by nature can give you a new kind of experience." Saying this can of course be changed. I think it's unlikely your tutor will ask for more on this sentence, but it all depends on how you'll change the next sentence with the However or Although.

Answer 9

Alright

Answer 10

So like this-
Camping or staying at a resort? Both are exciting and unique in their own way, and a resort located in Alaska could be entirely made of ice. Camping in the woods or wilderness surrounded by nature can give you a new kind of experience. Although camping can be an adventure and beautiful, a resort can allow for astonishing sites with perks of air conditioning/heat, cover from weather conditions, and no bugs that bite in the middle of the night.

Answer 11

That looks just about right. I think it has what your tutor is looking for. How do you like it though? It's your paper.

Answer 12

I like it.. To be honest I just want to finish it so that I can start my cause and effect essay that are both due on the 5th. So that I can do my final exam with another essay -.-

Answer 13

Wow. That's a lot of papers...

Answer 14

Yes and thats only for this class. I have 3 others

Answer 15

That's...yeah sorry to hear about that...

Answer 16

Yeah :/ .. Okay on to the first body

Answer 17

This is what I have already-

Camping in the woods is nice especially if the campers have something to sleep in, like a tent or camper. Something comfy and will keep the bugs out. If the camper has a tent a blow up mattress is great to have or an extremely fluffy sleeping bag. Maybe the campers aren’t ruffing it as much and have a camper or recreational vehicle to stay in. Rvs and campers have some similarities with resorts. Both have air conditioning/heat and are enclosed with a door to keep bugs outside, especially at night. An area to sit to play games or eat, and some resorts like suites have a kitchenette or full sized kitchen with everything; stove, sink, dishes, microwave. Although resorts have a lot of modern day perks, being outside allows people to go out of our technological society and breathe real fresh air.

I was told this-

Above, the beginning of this paragraph gives a supporting detail to its main idea.

Topic sentences in general give readers a preview of the main idea of body paragraphs to prepare them for the ideas to come. Consider these questions when developing your topic sentence:
• What is the main idea/discussion point of this paragraph? - Which aspect of comparison is it about? For example, is it about the level of comfort in camping and in staying in a resort?
• What should be your topic sentence to reflect that main idea or discussion point?

Answer 18

Ok I like what you have. The comparison is there. For me the main idea of this paragraph based on the beginning part of it, was that camping can be more enjoyable when in something like a RV. I like that because it supports your main idea of resorts being better. As you end the paragraph I started getting a little thrown off. "some resorts like suites have a kitchenette or full sized kitchen with everything; stove, sink, dishes, microwave." could probably be cut out of this paragraph and placed in the next one. and instead you could place a fact about campers that they don't have wifi. This way the last sentence looks like it's placed appropriately and you can bring up that in the final or next paragraph as a negative to camping.

Answer 19

It is good, but I feel you can elaborate less on what you personally feel about the topic and a little more on what other's point of view is and make sure you have credible sources to support your main points. If this is an essay that requires you not to have pre-revised research then you good as far as research goes in accordance to your personal view and your view in the subject.

Answer 20

I agree with grim, but don't forget about a counter argument! What's bad about camping, or being in the outdoors? You know? What is something you can think of that could be a downside? Look at what you wrote and see what you think of to make that "irritable" thing better. What is it about the downside you can make better? I hope that helps :)

Answer 21

So like this-

Camping in the woods is nice especially if the campers have something to sleep in, like a tent or camper. Something comfy and will keep the bugs out. If the camper has a tent a blow up mattress is great to have or an extremely fluffy sleeping bag. Maybe the campers aren’t ruffing it as much and have a camper or recreational vehicle to stay in. Rvs and campers have some similarities with resorts. Both have air conditioning/heat and are enclosed with a door to keep bugs outside, especially at night. Unlike resorts campers do not have wifi to connect to the internet. Although resorts have a lot of modern day perks, being outside allows people to go out of our technological society and breathe real fresh air.

Answer 22

Yes it does help.. Bad thing weather conditions ruining the campsite and bugs biting

Answer 23

Yes and now you have a step up in your next paragraph when you compare resorts to camping with wifi, bugs, and weather. Oh and just to give you something else it's terribly hard to park rv's and hook them up.

Answer 24

Lol yes I know.. Its fun to watch

Answer 25

I have this already --

At a resort people vacationing do not need to be concerned with the weather possibly destroying their campsite. Or being trapped and scared in a camper or rv. Which can be terrifying if a hurricane or snow storm occurs. In a resort the people staying can relax and enjoy themselves, by going to the indoor pool or hot tub, or the spa and getting a massage. Or for the kids the arcade or play areas. A campsite or open area the campers found, can be fun and enjoyable too if the weather is good, and no bugs are flying around bothering them. If it’s too hot people can become miserable especially if they are being eaten alive by mosquitos. However nice, walls of a resort can never allow someone the star light and freedom of camping.

Answer 26

Do you know how to use excel?? The two that usually help me aren't online

Answer 27

Yeah I guess it is lol!
Ok so beginning was great. It's kinda the same problem in the last paragraph where the ending is throwing me off a bit. You could maybe move that last sentence to the beginning/mid section. Then maybe add two sentence to it, small ones. I broke it up so it would be easier to see:
"At a resort people vacationing do not need to be concerned with the weather possibly destroying their campsite. Or being trapped and scared in a camper or rv. Which can be terrifying if a hurricane or snow storm occurs.

However nice, walls of a resort can never allow someone the star light and freedom of camping.

Although walls can come in handy.

In a resort the people staying can relax and enjoy themselves, by going to the indoor pool or hot tub, or the spa and getting a massage. Or for the kids the arcade or play areas. A campsite or open area the campers found, can be fun and enjoyable too if the weather is good, and no bugs are flying around bothering them. If it

becomes too hot though
people can become miserable especially if they are being eaten alive by mosquito's."

Can you refresh my memory on excel? I may know it.

Answer 28

I like that! Its this

Answer 29

The instructions want me to do some function thing and its not working

Answer 30

I wish I could help you with that but I'm lost in it. Sorry
Happy that helped a little!

Answer 31

Its okay.. I think I figured it out (maybe)

Answer 32

You should try looking it up on youtube I'm sure there is something that could help.

Answer 33

Google came up with directions... Should I add more to that body or move on for now?

Answer 34

I think you could move on

Answer 35

Okay.. I dont have another body. I changed my last main point. It was price and its now bugs.

Answer 36

Well you can totally work with this! in fact it's better with bugs because resorts are better about that where with price, camping is the better option.

Answer 37

Um. Resorts better because no bugs but camping better because of price?

Answer 38

yeah usually people have to pay well into the hundreds for a resort room. Camping is normally (depending on where you go) anywhere from 30-60 maybe 90 if your some where really nice.
Resorts when your out on patio's usually have the bug repellent lights, candles. campers have to bring there own stuff or they will be eaten alive.

Answer 39

Yeah.. But price is no longer part of my thesis or main points "Although camping can be an adventure and beautiful, a resort can allow for astonishing sites with perks of air conditioning/heat, cover from weather conditions, and no bugs that bite in the middle of the night."

Answer 40

Gotcha ok

Answer 41

I have to take care of some stuff really quick I should be back on in like 30 to an hour

Answer 42

Alright.. Ill work on excel

Answer 43

Good luck with that lol

Answer 44

Are you back on?

Answer 45

oh yeah sorry

Answer 46

Its okay.. Im still working on excel

Answer 47

how's that going?

Answer 48

Its going.. I fiured out what I have to do for this IF function thing. But I have to enter it one at a time 42 times on two sheets on two documents -.- I wouldnt wish this on my worst enemy

Answer 49

figured *

Answer 50

Geeze you'd think with all the technology we have things like would be made a lot simpler.

Answer 51

Yeah.. I dont get why its wont let me select all the columns to do the function all at once.. 42 more to go then im done with step 8 out of 19 -.-

Answer 52

holy smokes. I'm impressed you are still able to stay awake right now at that point doing that, i'd be sleeping lol

Answer 53

I wish I could go take a nap

Answer 54

lol you should try listening to music, it helps me focus when i'm doing something super boring. time will fly by a lot faster

Answer 55

Ill try that.. Officially done with step 8

Answer 56

Yay now only ten more to go, it sounds bad but it's eight less you had to do before

Answer 57

Yeah.. Actually 20. Since I have 2 assignments with 10 more steps

Answer 58

Nothing, i can't say anything to that, I could say I'm sorry but that's not really gonna help you

Answer 59

Lol nope

Answer 60

what do you have to do that for? like what class?

Answer 61

The excel is for my computer application mode class

Answer 62

What grade are you?

Answer 63

Freshman in college.. I use this site cause people on here are creative and I took a year off so im a bit rusting on somethings.. Like I haven't done a compare and contrast essay since middle school. And Ive never used excel till today

Answer 64

That's cool. I was looking up like a hundred question all the time and openstudy was always popping up somewhere. So after a while of ignoring it I looked into it found it pretty interesting. I haven't been on long, but so far so good the people on here are really nice

Answer 65

Yeah they are.. But be careful of the weird ones. Like yesterday some boy messaged me saying I had nice boobs and that he "fluttered" me the day before.. I responded nicely and told him not to speak to me like that and that I didn't know him then I reported and blocked him.

Answer 66

I joined this site in middle school. I didn't use it much till now

Answer 67

Geeze that's creepy. Not like you didn't already gather that. I always hear about things like that but I've never actually talk to someone it happened too. I'm so sorry. It makes me curious as to why people think they can talk to others like that.

Answer 68

It's cool you've been on that long. I was wondering how you were able to get all those SmartScores.

Answer 69

I guess they think that you cant do anything. If they said that in person you'd slap them or go off.... Oh I have no clue what they are or how I got them.. Im assuming its from getting metals

Answer 70

Yeah that makes sense.
That's a good point they probably are from the medals.

Answer 71

Welp

Answer 72

I hate that when you feel like you should say something but there isn't anything left to say it drives me crazy because a lot of people ask if your ignoring them it's just like no..but what am i supposed to say right now.. So if you just stop messaging it's fine lol

Answer 73

Lol okay.. I usually say "welp" when that happens

Answer 74

This is what I have so far

Answer 75

It looks great I really like it! Do you think you'll be putting another paragraph on it?

Answer 76

Yes I need two more paragraphs. The last body about bugs and the conclusion

Answer 77

What I thought. A great thing that can pertain to bugs and also give you more in favor of resorts for readers is location. Just as an idea because you have to be careful about repetition, without anything else related to or around the central idea of the paragraph it becomes very easy to just repeat the same things over.

Answer 78

Um okay... For example Orlando, Florida has mosquitoes and love bugs. And at a resort there are no wingspanroaches or flying palmetto bugs.

Answer 79

Exactly!

Answer 80

Okay... Now to put that into a paragraph...

Answer 81

For example Orlando, Florida has mosquitoes and love bugs. And at a resort there are no wingspanroaches or flying palmetto bugs. ***

Answer 82

Omg why is it doing that.. I typing no "wingspanroaches" and its changing it to wingspanroaches

Answer 83

-.- omg

Answer 84

LOL that's got to be frustrating I'm so sorry!

Answer 85

YES IT TOOK IT!

Answer 86

I dont get why it changed it after I clicked post

Answer 87

LOL
you can start it with "fortunately resorts have repellent's for their guest's" Then you could use the example you gave. (with wingspanroaches of course)

It's a long shot but it might be my computer it's acting really stupid I think I have to restart it I will be back in a few minutes.

Answer 88

Wow that was annoying lol.. Alright

Answer 89

Like this-

Fortunately resorts have repellent's for their guest's that keep away bugs such as, wingspanroaches and flying palmetto bugs.

Answer 90

That's great. Do you think you'll be able to work with that to build the rest of the paragraph?

Answer 91

Um I think so

Answer 92

Cool